[@babbysama]
The immidiete and only real problem I have with your sheet is the fact that you circumvent the skill system when you make things like learning and fighting encompass several disciplines. Swordmanship, Brawling and Archery are all very different skills and you cannot have them all incorporated under a single umbrella term.



[@Tea]

A rather large oversight keeps the story from making sense. Nubina and Melans Tear are on opposite sides of the continent. Refugees from Melan would escape south deeper into Naul Rahn or to the South east where Operath lies. To go so far east as to Melans Tear would mean walking on foot trough Undying infested land at that point of time.


Concerning the skills. Courage isn't something you need to put down as a skill as it not a thing you train and master, it something more innate and tied to your personality.

However, your sheet actually inspired me to include something extra in the Charachter sheet. Traits: These are not skills but rather more unique mental and physical features.

[@Riffus Maximus]

This might come as a bit of a slap to the face, but I totally take the responsibility for missing this. Vampires and Undead are not a viable race for several reasons. The main one being that the Duchess would never on her life allow a vampire or similar within her ranks. Her stake in the war is personal and her beef with all undead would likely have her decapitate your character on the spot. I am willing to work with you to as painlessly as possible adapt your charachter into something non-undead.