[quote=@NuttsnBolts]
[color=f26522]Keefer:[/color] The only questions I have about this character is how the Lunos actually works.

Dead Cell suppresses the [i]activation[/i] within the area, but what if a Lunos was already active while in the zone? If it does suppress an active Lunos then maybe the word [i]nullify[/i] might be a better option. A little more clarity on how it works would be advisable so people can understand any consequences for if they interact with your character.

The drawbacks might need some expansion as well. People can enter the Dead Cell with an active Lunos, but it doesn't tell us the consequences of entering, ie: does the ability deactivate or is it still active? There is also the limitation of use. While I don't like time based abilities, as time in a roleplay is indefinable, how long does this ability last for with opposing players and is there anything preventing the character from spamming the ability?
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I had a much longer version written up, but it seemed cumbersome and confusing. I guess what's left of the description needs some editing.

In a magical setting, Dead cell would be an area where everyone who enters it has "silence" cast on them. If you're in dead cell, you can't cast spells. if you're outside of dead cell, you can cast spells. It's that simple.

It's impossible for me to say how someone will be affected entering dead cell because i don't know how everyone's abilities will work. Entering dead cell suppresses the part of the human genome that allows Lunos to be used. If your lunos was to make a car appear out of thin air, you could get in it and drive into dead cell unafected. However, if your ability required constant input, like if you could fly or emoliate yourself, those abilities would be shut down as soon as you entered dead cell. Or in the case of flying, you might just not be able to change direction. I think other players will have a much better idea of how their lunos abilities will be affected by dead cell than I do. But if I had to guess (and as an example) here's what would probably happen to your characters.

I get the impression Jackson is constantly in control of gravity, and it's not something he "sets up." So entering dead cell would immediately cause gravity to return to normal.

Cerridwen could go either way. If she's actually placing her contentiousness inside a machine, dead cell would only prevent her from returning back to her own body, provided the original body was inside dead cell. But if it's a proxy thing, like she's controlling a robot remotely, dead cell would cut the communication off instantly.

Eidolon could teleport into dead cell, but not out.

There's nothing preventing Keefer from "spamming" the ability, but keefer doesn't really have the tools to exploit it. He's a carpenter, not a body builder. He also doesn't have access to firearms. But if we wanted a drawback, I guess it could be that his blood pressure rises, causing him to get increasingly irritable and for his adrenaline to start pumping. Over usage could cause him to black out, if not have a stroke. 

[quote=NuttsnBolts]

[color=f26522]Lenna/Holla:[/color] To be honest this character confused me a little bit until I reached towards the end of the character sheet, but I'm still scratching my head a little bit. I'm assuming that they are the same person with two different personas? It's just a little vague on some of these details to help grasp the image on who the character is as a whole. Remember, this is OOC information so if you need explain something here and state that it's not IC knowledge, then other players should take that into consideration when interacting with the character.

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The character is intentionally difficult to grasp. I enjoy surprising people, and I feel that revealing the impostor's true identity takes away from some of the fun. I feel that understanding both of these "personas" should let people interact with her well enough, better so than if they knew the full story. If that's not a satisfactory answer, then i'll gladly explain things over PM. But if I have to write down the impostor's true identity for everyone to see I'd just as soon not roll them.

[quote=NuttsnBolts]

The Imposter ability does raise a question, not to do with the ability, but how it will be played. What sort of indication will you be using so that players don't interact to your character and refer to her by the wrong name?

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If she's Lenna, I'll call her Lenna. If she's Holla, I'll call her Holla. 

I guess it would also be okay for people to call her impostor if they feel confused, or they look at my last post and scan for the character's name. The personas are so radically different it shouldn't be too hard to tell who appeared in the last post. Of course, people who plan on interacting with my characters should be reading my posts in full anyway. 

...Right? 

[quote=NuttsnBolts]

Did you have any plans of eventually showing off their face claims? (Just a curious thought, not related to the critique)
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Keefer I might do. I don't really like browsing for art much, but if I see something that makes me say "That's Keefer!" I'll put it up.

Impostor would be tough, if not impossible. Lenna would be easy enough to get a picture of, but Holla changes her look so much it would be hard to find something that matched her every form.

EDIT: I made the following changes to Keefer's ability section:

[color=MediumSpringGreen][sub]» [b]C A P A B I L I T I E S[/b][/sub][/color][indent][indent][color=6e757e]When active, Dead cell suppresses other human's abilities to control Lunos  within a ten foot radius. That's a twenty foot diameter sphere FYI.[/color][/indent][/indent]
[color=MediumSpringGreen][sub]» [b]D R A W B A C K S[/b][/sub][/color][indent][indent][color=6e757e]He can not exclude people from it's effects, and the longer he keeps it activated the higher his blood pressure gets. This gradually makes him more aggressive, triggers his adrenaline, and can cause him physical harm if not properly managed.[/color][/indent][/indent]

Also, his aggression is no longer something he does automatically, it's triggered by his lunos.