Ok, then, another set of reviews inbound.

[@PentagonWhite]: Accepted.

[@duskshine749]: Accepted as well. It would help me greatly if you placed you CS in a hider when you add it to the character tab.

[@The1Rolling1Boy]: Better, but not there yet with the writing style. Let me give you a couple more recommendations. 1st, remove those asterisks. You don't need them to indicate a narration/action on your text, as anything that's not between dual quotation marks, is automatically taken as narration in normal writing. Serious, that's the #01 problem, a vice that is confusing and useless. 2nd, add punctuation, you went through the whole paragraph without using a single period. How people are supposed to read that when they don't know when a sentence ends and the other begins? I hope this helps you figure what proper prose writing is.