[@Hostile] All right, so there are two or three little problems I need to bring up. As with the other app, I'll give you some good with the bad.

[b][u]The Good[/u][/b][list][*]Cool, cool history! I love the family heirloom, which as a trope can easily end up feeling contrived and silly (usually it's a centuries-old family sword in some crummy Fantasy setting).[*]I'm admiring the diversity in backgrounds here so far, and yours is no different. A middle-class military family serving the Soviet utopia will stand in fascinating contrast to the career criminals and other lowlifes. I can't wait to see how he feels about the collapse of the USSR.[/list][b][u]Improvements Needed[/u][/b][list][*]No anomalies or artifacts here. This is S.T.A.L.K.E.R. [i]without[/i] the psychic C-consciousness stuff.[*]I dunno if psychopathy is "developed." Maybe it ought to just "emerge" instead? As in, it was always laying dormant inside him, and something in the Zone has dragged it out? I dunno. I'll trust you on this one.[*]The one thing you still need to explain is why he has come to [i]this [/i]zone, when surely there are others in Russia which would have been easier for him to infiltrate. Why come to Germany?[/list]

He's pretty good, mate, and pretty close to being accepted!