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To make the sheet easier to work out, we think we’ll recommend dropping Psychometry, since you’re fairly clearly set on Force Stealth.


But we will ask this one small set of questions about it, which we’d like to see a response from the mindset of Shiri on:
What use is Force Stealth to Shiri at the present (pre-sacking Coruscant)? What made her want to learn it, and how did she get access to one of the holocrons with the relevant knowledge on it?


While it would have been easy for her to get this knowledge from a Sith Holocron, had she gotten hold of one, Jedi Holocron gatekeepers are notoriously stubborn and not known for sharing lore without reason. We can easily see how you as a player find it very useful for your character to know, but we’d like the above As Shiri sees it.


Note, this is not a denial of the power, but rather that we want to be sure that this is something Shiri wants, not just something you want for Shiri. A request for [i]her[/i] justifications, one might say.
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These two sections can be confusing at times to keep apart. You’re not the only one who has asked, nor do we think you will be the last.


Force Powers section is in the IC format, as that asks the character to explain what he can do with the Force, both in general range of varied powers and in level of skill. You can of course edit this later as the character develops further IC.


Force Potential is in OoC format and deals with how much raw power your character has, how much (s)he can learn. These limits are far harder than those found in the Force Powers section. Whereas a Jedi (or Sith) can learn to use new powers, his or her raw power is usually not something that can be changed. It is what it was at birth. Does that make some sort of sense?


Here you might also put elements she herself does not know about in relation to her force abilities. Latent powers, forgotten powers, things requiring more self-insight than she has, etc… Unknown flaws (like Obi-wan having [u]terrible[/u] telekinetic barriers)
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[quote=Review]In situations that will come up in Aftermath, No Jedi will truly be without the Force. The Force is a part of all Jedi (and Sith). It's as much as part of them as their limbs, their eyes or their lungs, but where the latter two can be cut away, the Force is not focused within any single part of their bodies. The Force is everywhere. [/quote]


[quote=Your review questions]why is this here? what do you mean? I don't understand what I wrote that would prompt this little bit of (what seems to be) musing. [/quote]
This is the trigger segment:
[quote=CS]I specialize in the Ataru form of Lightsaber combat, but I’m light and quick in a fight even without a lightsaber or the force with me. [/quote]
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Right now, the flaws section is too squeezed-together to make it easy to spot individual flaws. There’s not all that many flaws there currently that are hers personally and that are directly problematic for her. Most of her flaws are species-based, self-sacrificial tendencies and lack of trust for turned Sith (should that happen). That last bit is hardly a flaw at all. Its plain prudence.


If you could spread them out a bit, it’d be very helpful for both spotting flaws and fleshing them out so that they affect her more. Also, it might be wise to consider adding some flaws related to skills and physical capacity.
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What has made her want to become a shadow in the future? Its a fairly specialized “job”, so something must’ve happened to push her onto this path, right?
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Rephrasing that section to say more like you put in your commentary should help fix that.
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