[@Raddum]
I've omitted Cecil's mention of the specific name of his world (a.k.a. Earth), in order to avoid killing the conversation before anything you said could happen. I'm thinking it makes sense that he's not quite as thorough about the details as I am, so it makes sense if he takes an extra post or two to think about saying it in comparison to me.

On your end, I think you need to write her response in a way that involves her only responding to his entire explanation after he's finished mentioning the Dragoon part as well. I actually did write his response pointing out that he only stopped for a brief moment between sentences to think about how to word himself, but I've taken the liberty of adding an extra line to emphasize that she wouldn't have had enough time to interrupt him.

This should get us back on track.

Overall, I enjoyed the portrayals you've presented with each character. I noticed the bit of foreshadowing with Zidane's mention of 'cuties' too, which I thought was cool and fitting for how he behaved prior to meeting Garnet.

I still, on the other hand, need people's thoughts regarding the flashback.