[@Burning Kitty] Why are you being so passive-aggressive? It was just some constructive criticism, we all make mistakes from time to time and it's good that they're pointed out so we can be better writers, nothing in the original post conveyed what you were trying to get across, your character seemed to dislike Gamorreans "just because" and they got into a fight and your character somehow beat it, plus the post doesn't really go anywhere, it honestly just seemed like fluff.