[@Stern Algorithm] In my opinion, the biggest difference between plate armor and scifi mech armor is aerodynamics. I mean, add magic to plate and you even have the glowy bits! Ailanthus in Chains -> Alice in Chains *giggle* I already said I liked the chains. Might even be able to get ones with some sort of element on 'em, could be nice -- or something to work towards. Nice to see an older lady, and one with a degree! Too often video game anime are just teens. No, no, I'm sorry, I'm not giving up my games no matter how many levels I've got irl. T.T YOU CAN'T MAKE ME! I like the idea of someone who sees themself as bland. Yay glasses~ But the question is, is she subject to blurry vision without them? ...her picture reminds me of Yomiko Readman. Don't think it's her, though. You might need to tweak the description of her armor, if you're really going with fantasy-style plate, though I think it's not absolutely necessary. Personality seems interesting, and it will be interesting to play with someone who is likely to flare up and/or stress. I notice that you have used Tessa to refer to Eileen as well as Ailanthus (namely in personality). Please do make sure that you use it to refer to only her in-game self, unless she actually sees that avatar and identity as truly her. I know I use "you" to mean both "you the player" and "your character", but in third person IC/reference narrative, I feel the distinction should be made. She seems well considered and interesting, and I believe her and Elian clashing should be fun. Elian: NO HEALZ 4 U! No seriously, I have to res one more party member because of you, that's it. No heals. I personally feel that Paranoid Perception is a mental benchmark, as it deals with what she observes and notices, not what she is able to do actively. For Elian's Saw It Coming, there's an element of attention, but the primary one is the reaction. Again, [@Gowi] needs to take a look because...benchmarks. @.@ Cock Block is a hilarious name, and a clever benchmark. On the flip side, I'd say that...actually most of your mental benchmarks seem more like physical ones to me. So definitely talk this over if Gowi's not given you the go-ahead. ...Anyhow, I...honestly can't see much to be critical of beyond benchmarks, and I don't feel confident about my understanding of what Gowi's looking for there to say "do this", so I'm gonna use this new thing I learned about in a writing class last month! We start with things I know. I know she's not really well-adjusted, lacking in self-esteem, and generally a loner. I know she loves her science, and is not particularly invested in Pariah as an rp-type game, and doesn't really care who she bothers. I don't know how she ended up in her current job, how she feels about marriage and kids, and how her relationship is with her family. I would like to know more about how she learned her trade in Pariah, and what she hopes to accomplish in the game.