[quote=@Mr Allen J]
[@The book of bad juju] Pretty solid overall, but there's a few things that come to mind.

1). You didn't exactly explain how he learned his fighting style in his backstory. You say that his father and grandfather used a bolas, but didn't mention him grabbing any before he left at least. Especially since you made a big deal about him inheriting the family's traits. In an RP like this, I'd like training and the sorts to play a part in their past. Along with the fact I don't know where he learned how to rip holes in space. Is that a magic or ki technique?

2). This is probably me being anal retentive, and because you didn't provide a picture, but I can't get an idea of what he looks like. You were pretty vague, but, again, this is because you couldn't find a picture. lol

3). I'm a bit curious about his moveset because you said that he's weak up close, but he has a variety of close ranged moves. Are they weak, or...?

4). This is something tiny, but could you remove the space in the [ hr] tags? So they can form those fancy lines!

And don't get me wrong, he's not rejected, I just want a few things cleared up.
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1). The fighting style i'm intentionally leaving vague and low-powered. This guy is meant to be the equivalent of a Peacock from Skullgirls, Phoenix Wright in Marvel vs capcom, Mr Game and Watch from Smash. Not characters who fight because they're the bestest at fighting nor to explain a sensible philosophy of consequentialist ethics, but because they wanna get loaded and have a good time, use every gimmick in the book to win without actually being stronger. The ripping holes in space thing is just a ki thing, though. It would be much stronger if he ever bothered to train it, but he hasn't. I've added a few paragraphs in his history to explain most of this up.

2). Yeah, that's still annoying. Thinking of just making a bad sketch and scanning it in.

3). You've hit the nail on the head.

4). Done and done.