[@ERode] Phoebe believes in a higher being that started it all, but she isn't going to worship it or anything.
I'm not sure where that question surfaced but I hope this answers it.

as for the whole science thing, I chose to use science to basically allow Phoebe to have multiple kinds of magic.
mostly fire, ice, sound and force magic, but the science turns all those into one ability.
I could simply say that she can have all those abilities on their own but it would make her sound a bit OP, of course the range of her abilities is minimal, mostly close quarters.
as for the Talentium weapons, you said this: 
"For females, Talentium enhances their ability to cast magic. By pushing their mana through Talentium, they are able to bring forth much more power than normally possible. A lightning bolt becomes a pillar of electricity. A fire ball becomes a torrent of flames. A gust of wind becomes a howling tornado."
I understood from this that the Talentium enhances the strength of the users magic capabilities, not just the weapon.
I'll change it to only enhance the daggers though if you want it.

As for the magic awakening, I went on a hunge and figured that it was a thing, wrong of course, I'll edit the bio so she gains magic training in the army.
lastly, the bio has more than 5 points but some of them aren't really life-changing so I thought it would be ok, but i'll change it to really only feature the important stuff.

That should cover everything you said ^^