[@BlackSam3091] 

Thank you for the feedback, I realise the points you brought up and it has got me thinking as well

Q - He was the largest, and so felt the need to push himself to keep up? That’s a strange thought process. Did you mean to say newest, or was there some kind of bias against him for his size?

A - It was supposed to be newest, thank you for pointing that out. Sometimes I get so into it that i forget to actually read it aloud to see if it makes any actual sense.

Q - Why were Turian separatists hiding out on Illium?

A - Illium, well it's a beautiful planet, and I don't see to many people I guess for a better word 'explore' the non-poplated parts. As for the Turain Separatists, it was the first thing that came to mind, I guess it could be a large band of mercs now that I think of it.

Q - Whats he been doing in the year since the end of the war?

A - Good question, I will add something in, it seem I forgot a step.

Q - You say he has a need for vengeance, but a vengeance against whom?

A - Now that would ruin the secret, all jokes aside if you'd like me to add why he has a vengeance I don't have a problem with that, or we could leave it as a 'loyalty mission' if you'd like to go that route, either or.

Q - A minor gripe would be that he’s a vanguard with a sniper rifle. Would he not be better served by a shotgun? Leave the sniping to someone who doesn’t already specialise in close quarters combat.

A - I can see the problem, an easy fix.