[@Ryik]
See, this is exactly what I'm talking about. It's hard to build relationships when you keep jumping to conclusions like this, don't you know? 

I guess I can't fault you too much for it, though, considering you've obviously taken my writing advice to heart. I feel a lot more investment from your posts now. One point I should note, however, is that you're starting to lose some details; most recently, the bit about Elly getting dropkicked in the face, plus my character's current appearance and gender. You're improving as we go, though, and I think that's really great!

Anyway, let me know when you've edited your post, okay? Since I can't really post until you do, and all.