[quote=@Mira Yasaka] [img]http://i276.photobucket.com/albums/kk37/Bogman_photo/Sci-Fi%20Film%20Stills%20quatro/Hestonlaugh2.gif[/img] [hider=Dane the Marauder][b]Name:[/b] Dane [b]Alias:[/b] The Marauder [b]Race:[/b] Meta Human [b]Sex:[/b] ???????????????????? [b]Class:[/b] Transporter [b]Equipment:[/b] -Bird's Beak Paring Knife -Bread Knife/Slicer -Boning Knife -Combat Knife -Voice Modulator -Bow and Arrow -Hack Phone -Daggers Simply put it this way, all types of small knives all over the world stored in Storage Collection at home. ALL FOR THE LOVE OF COOKING! [b]Abilities:[/b] Dane specializes in covert operations, in other words stealth and any movement is quick and decisive. Knives are Dane's preference of combat along with the use of bow and arrow. Combat skills aside, Dane is particularly neat in cooking considering the store of knives that is kept at home, specializing in Asian and Middle Eastern dishes. The supernatural ability of Dane is Warping, at its current level, Dane is able to distinguish mass and able to see masses of masses at will, this allows Dane to decide whether or not teleporting into such areas is safe or not. Warp is a teleport variation; specialized on traveling through dimensions. It allows one to create warp holes or portals unlike teleportation, the ability is dependent on stamina and the user's memory power. One can transport anything they want as long as they can sustain the portal and remember how it came to be. Evidently dependent on the stamina and mass amount, bigger objects are extremely difficult to transport, let alone living things. Since Dane's Warp is limited, the amount of transporting is dependent on stamina and memory. Dane will never have the power to warp people but at least open a portal, user friendly for everybody to pass through another dimension. Dane can open dimensions as long as stamina is adequate enough to execute and maintain but this is something that can't be done freely because it requires memorization, opening a dimension is a complex process. Oddly, for a specialized travelling ability, the weaponry of Dane particularly throwing weapons can be increased in momentum with the help of warp. The price of Warp is that, it makes one forgetful and crippled due to the muscular strains at certain instances which is why Dane uses Warp wisely and not freely. Another one is literally warped and distorted minds, Warpers who are driven by madness are literal abominations of space, their bodies will not only be crippled but will become a Warp Wraith. [b]Fighting Style:[/b] Dane's style of fighting is decisive, literally circling opponents until they tire out, this method is called "wild goose chase" due to the preference of long distance, bow and arrow. When it is close combat, Dane prefers using knives and multiple kicks and dirty tricks such as spitting on ones face. Dane's fighting style changes when warp is involved, warp is only effective when preparation time is granted, an example of it would be the arrows launched from the bow will have increased momentum due to the velocity granted by warp. Warp although limited is versatile and is good for team battles which Dane even openly admits because it is tactical. [b]Personality:[/b] Don't be surprised for the amount of creepiness that runs through every bit of being of Dane, in particular moments of popping out of nowhere. Simply a masked person who is extremely hyperactive and awkward, it is really hard to tell if Dane is serious or not because it either ends up as a sarcastic answer or a not serious one at all. Dane's gender is another thing, it is really hard to tell if this masked bastard is a male or a female despite the many hints which are misleading. Body language is the best way that Dane can express as well as the loud persona that is equipped. Dane is a lover of food, 24/7 food talk and 15% water talk, Dane hates it when food is wasted and anything that lacks precision, Dane simply expresses sadness and a crying pose when the bad happens. If it is a happy news, Dane rejoices through the expression of gestures such as jumping and laughing. Battle Mode Dane is the same as good ol' Dane because Dane has a No Kill Policy unless needed, Dane literally trolls those who have it coming. What is Dane really. A boy or a girl? [b]Bio:[/b] ..... [b]Wish:[/b] Dane's wish is to undo the mistakes committed in the past(personal ones). Ultimately believing that either through time travel or a higher version of warp. [b]Echo:[/b] (describe and explain a place of significance to your character, perhaps relating to the wish) [b]Appearance: [/b] [img]http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_P-IiiJsZVos/TTEqDuF7Z3I/AAAAAAAAAAk/BFIsCEA_OOs/s1600/Jill_Cloak.jpg[/img] [b]Frenzy: [/b] The world around you(surroundings) will cripple and it is literally going to be a mad fest when Dane is hurt badly. Simply put, crippling dimensions and shattering dimensions. This only happens in an emotional state. [b]Inventory:[/b] Phylactery?[/hider] Some confuzzling character with a Tobi/Obito identity puzzle motif coming through. Still a WIP, I honestly am working with the backstory right now but I had fun making this. GAhhh I'm crying with tears of joy right now. I seriously dunno what to do with the echo... [/quote] He seems like a fun weirdo! Warp is a powerful ability, but you've balanced it out with enough drawbacks that it doesn't breach the general power level I'm looking for. Once you get done with the backstory, I'm sure there will be a place that would fit the Echo perfectly--like, say, the place where he committed those egregious personal mistakes. By this: [quote]Ultimately believing that either through time travel or a higher version of warp.[/quote] I assume you mean he wants to travel back through time in order to right his wrongs himself, rather than magically fix whatever went wrong? One issue: the Frenzy isn't quite done correctly. In its current state, you have no monstrous transformation, and the power-related effects of the Frenzy are somewhat vague. Mystery and vagueness can be used to make some pretty cool stuff, but that's not the intent of the character sheet; save the coolness for the IC, and use the sheet to explain to the very best of your ability how stuff works specifically. For instance: [quote]The world around you(surroundings) will cripple and it is literally going to be a mad fest when Dane is hurt badly. Simply put, crippling dimensions and shattering dimensions[/quote] This is all well and good, but what do crippling dimensions and shattering dimensions actually do? Cause confusion? Inflict random wounds? Mess with space? Afflict senses? Create illusions? Cause madness? Once this is ironed out, your character will be on the right track, and I'll be able to wholeheartedly anticipate the completion of the sheet.