[quote=@Mercurial] Look, I don't mean any disrespect, but I really don't agree with this assessment. My character is supposed to be a Yankee/Delinquent cliche, and I know your character has elements of that, but they're more someone that's been mistaken for being one than actually being one. I mean, I wrote that my character committed crimes, and crimes that weren't simply defending herself. Unless I've vastly misunderstood what I've read, I don't think your Akiko would go around smashing people's windows in when they didn't do anything other than expand their business, and I think that's a fairly extreme gulf of difference right there. I don't think "slightly meaner" does justice to the difference here; your character might break the rules when she thinks they're unfair, but mine would break the rules when it suits her even if the rules are the only thing standing between the earth and hell. I know I wrote that thing about fighting bullies, but I didn't mean it as though she actually went around fighting bullies all day. In fact, more often than not, she's being a bit of a bully herself, seeing as the people she does stuff to don't exactly deserve the level of retribution she exacts on them. It was more just to play into the trope of delinquent characters not being total monsters, at least when they aren't faceless side characters or villains. It's like, she can be a nice person under really exceptional circumstances, but she's really bloody petty too, and I don't think your character is supposed to be anything like that. Also, I think her vanity is a pretty large difference between the two. Your character is not only poor, but you specifically wrote that they don't care about fashion, where mine really really cares. I read that female delinquents are often portrayed Kogals/Gyaru girls, which is why I wrote all that stuff for Yasu about her being consumed with having nice things. She's the kind of person that will talk and talk about the latest trends whereas yours would probably try and tune that stuff out. I mean, yeah, I can see some similarities, and believe me I read all the sheets before I made mine. But I don't think it's fair to say they're "almost exactly the same", and I believe there's more than enough to make them both distinct from the other. You compared your character to Goku earlier (in the sense you said she would be like Goku to Ryuuto's Vegeta), while Yasu is definitely more of a Vegeta. Heck, she'd probably strongly consider beating people up to gain immortality if she could; there might be a good person hiding in there, but there's a vain and petty person manning the helm. [/quote] Hmmm...alright, I believe this is fair. I suppose I'm just being a little bit paranoid when accepting characters who have similar traits to others, since that's been the downfall of many RPs that I've been a part of in the past and also because I want there to be enough differences between the characters for there to be conflict. However, I admit I might have been a little too harsh in this case though, and I might not have read the CS as close as I thought I did (a mistake I will try to avoid in the future). You've made a strong enough argument for your character that I'm willing to take back the criticism. So yeah, she's accepted [quote=@VitaVitaAR] [hider][list][*][u][b]Name:[/b][/u] Natsuki Sumiko [*][u][b]Age:[/b][/u] 15 [*][u][b]Gender:[/b][/u] Female [*][u][b]Personality:[/b][/u] Sumiko is a friendly, cheerful girl with a very outgoing personality. She enjoys meeting new people and making friends, and could even be described as rather aggressively friendly, eager to introduce herself to others. She believes that people can solve any kinds of problems if they can just get through to one another, and so naturally she wants to build relationships with everyone in order to ensure that it's easy to solve problems for others. Sumiko likes helping people and will go out of her way to do so, even if it's to her own detriment. Even if it seems nearly impossible. Even if that person is seemingly her enemy, she'll try to talk to them and see what's wrong. This cheery, friendly demeanor seems to be nearly unbreakable... nearly. While Sumiko is determined to try and talk out any problems, even those of her enemies, she also won't hesitate to fight and attempt to defeat them in order to get through to them. And if someone is [i]truly[/i] terrible, she'll try to beat them as hard as she can. Truly heinous acts can make her truly angry. In most cases, however, Sumiko is friendly and easygoing, just wanting to make friends and help people out. However, she has a bad habit of charging into things without thinking them through. Sumiko absolutely loves food, as well, eating a great deal more then anyone would ever expect she can pack away in her body. In fact, it seems almost impossible that anyone could eat as much as she does and still remain healthy, but somehow she manages this astounding feat. Perhaps she somehow stores it away somewhere inside her. Regardless, Sumiko loves good food and eats a huge amount of it. She claims this recharges her energy. She also has a strong sense of justice, refusing to allow innocent people to get hurt. [*][u][b]Backstory:[/b][/u] From an early age, Sumiko loved stories of heroes. She loved hearing about justice, about the people who fought for the innocent, to protect others. Sumiko wanted to help people like that. To help everyone, everyone she could. Even people who called themselves villains, if she could. Growing up, she constantly volunteered to help people, constantly jumped to the defense of people being bullied, and generally tried as hard as she could to be a hero like she wanted to be. To help people in need. However, this often got her in trouble, or even bullied herself. In spite of all of this, she wanted to keep helping anyone she could. Even the bullies when it came down to it. When her abilities awakened she was overjoyed. Now, she wants to be the best hero she can be. [*][u][b]Appearance:[/b][/u] [url=https://safebooru.org//images/2099/5d7919187b5e90ab1a29ed3fc3dfaadf8ae63fb2.png?2189015]"Oh, did you want one? Uhhh, do you mind that I already took bites out of both?"[/url] She's about average height for her age and ethnicity. [*][u][b]Equipment:[/b][/u] Sumiko doesn't carry anything out of the ordinary for a schoolgirl. [*][u][b]Abilities:[/b][/u] Sumiko isn't exceptionally athletic but she does decently well enough, and can fight remarkably well in hand to hand with an unpredictable amateur style featuring a lot of kicks and punches. She's actually quite a good cook when it comes to Japanese food, as well. [*][u][b]Channeller category:[/b][/u] Augmentor [*][u][b]Description of power:[/b][/u] [u]Star Shiner[/u] - Sumiko has a baseline amount of energy, which she usually splits evenly between her four limbs. This results in twenty-five percent of her energy being in each of her arms and legs, increasing her strength greatly and causing each of them to glow slightly when in a fight. However, she can divert this energy to enhance any of the limbs' strikes more, producing much more powerful strikes and a more brilliant, flame-like aura around the limb being enhanced. Without any other augmentation, she can shunt a hundred percent of her energy into one limb for an attack. However, she has some abilities that allow her to do more then this, and she may learn even more. [*][u][b]Names/descriptions of moves:[/b][/u] [list][*][u]Star Igniter![/u] - Sumiko's basic ability to channel energy into her limbs. [*][u]Stellar Impact Punch/Kick![/u] - Sumiko increases the amount of energy in her fist or foot at the expense of her other limbs, up to fifty percent. [*][u]Super Stellar Impact Punch/Kick!![/u] - Sumiko goes up to seventy-five percent in one limb, increasing her strength further, but only for that one limb and at the expense of more energy for one or more of her other limbs. [*][u]Meteor Justice ~ Supernova Buster!!![/u] - Sumiko focuses all her energy into her fist, causing it to ignite like a star. On impact, it erupts into a small explosion. [*][u]Starburst Overdrive[/u] - Sumiko temporarily breaks her limits and manages to channel a hundred percent into all four limbs. Her entire body blazes like a star while she does this, but it's extremely exhausting to the point of collapse.[/list] [*][u][b]Character theme song:[/b][/u] [url=https://youtu.be/S4ekO1SlX5o]Emotional Skyscraper~[/url][url=https://youtu.be/AT1baS9a4nE]Cosmic Heart[/url] [*][u][b]Other:[/b][/u] N/A[/list][/hider] [/quote] This character seems fine, accepted