[quote=@RolePlayerRoxas]
[@floodtalon] All righty, few things. I'm worried that all these different bullet effects give him too many different abilities to work with. I dunno if Vita would be willing to let you gradually obtain them, but right now that's five completely different effects he can utilise.

The invisibility also overlaps with Ryougu's character, and I'm not sure if that's a thing that could work as a skill. Megumi needs to use her Device to obtain invisibility after all, though Vita would be able to clarify that when she returns.

Finally, I think the personality/backstory could do with a little expanding. It looks a little bare-bones right now.

[s]Good job choosing the best club though[/s]
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Personality is something I like to establish in RP, having a deadset personality from the get go limits creativity which is quite annoying in my experience. while backstory is barebones because not everyone has a crazy tragic past that needs to be comminicated. He's just a kid with shirty parents, the rest of his life is pretty normal.

Invisibility I can change to something else, but I really did plan on having him be a stealth assassin type character so short invisibility bursts would work best for him.

As for abilities... yeah I could probably remove the black hole thing for a while, but the other ones I view as somewhat necessary.

[s]Delienquent club best club indeed[/s]