Alright, here's what I see. You can feel free to take and do whatever with the advice I'm about to give you, but this is how I would address your interest check one part at a time. [quote=@awa1997] Hello all, this is my first interest check, so please inform me if I do anything wrong in it. [/quote] It is not necessary to tell people "this is my first time." Even if it's true, people will think you are inexperienced and not show interest. You don't have to lie, but you don't have to tell the truth either. Your honestly won't net you any extra interest in this instance. [quote=@awa1997] I don't have a plot for this yet, but I do have enough information to get it out there before the plot. It's made for a larger group, but could be split among a smaller group. IT honestly depends on how many people want in. [/quote] You sound a little unsure of yourself here. "It's made for a large group, but could be made for a smaller group" sounds like "It's made for a large group, but I'm not confident enough my idea will generate enough interest." If you're indecisive about something, don't mention it. I also wouldn't tell people you don't have a plot for this yet, because that makes it sound like you don't know what you want to do. Instead, you could say something along the lines of "I'd like to brainstorm a plot for this," which sounds like taking player feedback is all part of your master plan. And you DO have a master plan. [quote=@awa1997] This RP will be set on earth, the time frame will most likely be modern day, though this is not set in stone. The world is inhabited by beings known as Mages. Mages are people that have magic powers, but each Mage is limited to controlling a single element, while each element also has only one Mage. The powers of the different elements can overlap, but no two have the exact same power set. Mages are nearly immortal, and cannot die of natural causes, but there are things that can kill them. They try to stay out of the public eye and work behind the scenes. If they die, their powers can be taken, but are usually given to someone else by another Mage to pick up where they left off. A side effect of this type of reincarnation is that certain personality traits can be passed on through reincarnation, such as one Mage feeling obliged to protect another even though there's no real reason to, or two Mages falling in love over and over throughout different incarnations, or even two characters hating each other over and over. [/quote] I tend to break things down into sub categories and use pictures and such to make things more fun to look at, but there isn't anything wrong here really. It just looks a little boring for an interest check. [quote=@awa1997] Eventually I would like to have a full timeline of the Mages to put up, including all mast incarnations' birth and death dates, but to start with that's unnecessary. What I would like is somewhat of a degree of historical accuracy with your characters, but it doesn't have to be perfect accuracy, after all, these are characters that work behind the scenes to keep the world in order, so they may have tweaked some circumstances over the centuries. [/quote] I would not reassure my players that they didn't need to have perfect accuracy after suggesting you want historical accuracy, etc. I think what you're trying to say is "I want to have some lore." [quote=@awa1997] The Mages will be overpowered by nature, but the majority of powers should only affect mortals, and the majority of characters will be Mages, so the strength of their powers probably won't be too much of a problem, but if they are, I would let you know. [/quote] I don't think this part is necessary. We all know you're going to GM the RP. [quote=@awa1997] Sorry for the wall of text, but hopefully it's enough to give you an idea of if you'd enjoy the concept. If you have any questions, I will answer as best as I can. [/quote] You do not have to apologies for writing an interest check smaller than some casual posts. Nor should you hope about things that you know you did a good job explaining. You will not answer as best as you can, you will answer, full stop. [hr] Overall, your problem is that you're too modest and you don't know how to write interest checks. Don't tell people about your inexperience or that you don't know what to do. People will automatically assume the worst and not join. while you shouldn't act like a smug dick, there's nothing wrong with expressing a healthy amount of confidence and excitement for your idea. When I read your interest check, it's almost like you're not sure if anyone is going to be interested in it or not. And if you aren't sure of yourself, why should I be sure of you? The interest check that Buddha posted is an example of how you can make a decent looking interest check with just a few effects. If you want to see more that you can do with BBCoding [url=http://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/153116-the-art-beauty-of-bbcoding-complete/ooc]go here[/url]. Do not be intimidated by the word coding, it's all very simple, and you don't have to use all of it. Word of the day is "production value." If it looks like you've spent a lot of time on the interest check, that tells people you are dedicated to the idea and will continue to put a lot of work into it going forward. Buddha makes some good points. I wouldn't have thought to address the title, but that's very important for original RPs.