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No, it's fine, it's just hard to tell what's going on because your entire post is one big thing. You need to cut it up, separate it, so it's easier to tell what's going on. Each part, each chapter, each section is a short story, a scene, a particular perspective or two: When you have your leader talking to your commander, that's one scene. Then cut it so we know it changes, and describe it.

I had so much trouble with that last post because it was one big long ramble that didn't specify anything for me. Okay, so some random utility ship detected one of mine, and identified it. Where? How far away was it from the edge of my space, or your space? More to that, it was difficult to know who was speaking because all your dialogue was all over the place, with two or three different people talking, and only some of it being sorta labelled.[hr]
This is just friendly criticism, so that we can all write a post, and not have to ask anyone about it, because we understood it perfectly. That being said, if anything I say is confusing, please tell me.