Alright I am done the first draft, please, please critique as I am still feeling like I am not grasping everything and would love your guys' help. Thanks.

[hider=Kaneda Kitomuru]
[color=ed1c24][b]Name:[/b][/color] Kaneda Kitomuru

[color=ed1c24][b]Nicknames:[/b][/color] Whisper

[color=ed1c24][b]Age:[/b][/color] 24

[color=ed1c24][b]Gender:[/b][/color] Male

[color=ed1c24][b]Master of:[/b][/color] Archer

[color=ed1c24][b]Command Seal Location:[/b][/color] On his forehead inbetween his eyes.

[color=ed1c24][b]Wish:[/b][/color] To bring the people that killed his sister to rightful justice, which in his mind is death and bring death to all with the will to kill.

[color=ed1c24][b]Origin:[/b][/color] Silence

[color=ed1c24][b]Appearance:[/b][/color]
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[color=ed1c24][b]Personality:[/b][/color] Kaneda doesn't speak much, his voice box was damaged as a young child, so when he speaks, he speaks in a low whisper when he does speak, and even then it sounds sickly, raspy and can only be heard if you were close up to him. Instead he relies on his body language act as his speech as well as using his cell phone to display messages to his companions when the message cannot be conveyed by body language alone. He is athletic and calm, tries to be humorous in his comments in order to hide his inner anger and sadness but can be quick to release that anger if someone were to instigate hostility towards him. He loves a good fight and will jump in whenever he can.

[color=ed1c24][b]Biography:[/b][/color] Kaneda was born with a twin sister, the two did everything together. Unfortunately during his birth the ambilical chord had wrapped around his neck and severely damaged his vocal chords. When he was old enough to talk, all that would come out were sounds loud enough to be a whisper. So his sister became the more outspoken of the two often speaking for him when they were involved in a discussion.

It wasn't long to find out that the twins were given the gift of magi and were to be contestants in the next holy grail war. Their connection as twins somehow allowed them to be able to transfer the power to one antoher and increase on of their powers by double. So their parents sent them to a clan of magi that had no contestants of their own and were willing to teach them in order to not be left out of the war.

At first, they only did physical training, learning different styles of martial arts such as Jeet Kune Do and Kyusho-Jitsu, as well as the art of Nunchaku because it was a quick and effective style of fighting and the weapons could be easily concealed and used as a surprise attack. Kaneda and his sister would train for years in order to make sure that their bodies were hardened and strong.

After the physical training came the time to use their magic. Kaneda learned that he was able to silence and dampen the noise around him as well as focus on silencing a particular item if need be. His sister was gifted with the opposite and was able to amplify her voice to levels that would shatter the foundations of buildings as well as amplify the noises around her to be able to hear footsteps of anyone trying to sneak around her.

Everything was going well and it looked as if the two were going to be strong candidates for the war. Until one day while training Kaneda's sister slipped and landed on a stool, snapping her neck and paralyzing her from the neck down. This devestated the two and he almost gave it all up to take care of his sister. But the magi made him a deal, that if they had his sister transfer all her power over to him they would take care of her and after they one he could wish her back to full health. He agreed and that night they did a ceremony in order to make the transfer complete. When Kaneda awoke he could feel her power surge through him as well but also felt that something else was wrong. The magi would not let him see her as they said she needed to rest from the strain. He reluctantly agreed and proceeded to the process of summoning a servant. 

Using a piece of the ancient round table that was kept in safe keeping by this clan of magi he was able to summon the archer. They bonded and trained together learning about his new partner. It was then that he was also presented with a pair of nunchuks that were given a trump card, he was told that when the nunchuks would impact against a target it would absorb a little bit of his opponents mana and release it in a small burst of energy back at his opponent. This would make himself more prepared and able to fight during the war. He eagerly accepted this new gift. 

But still, even after all this, something felt wrong and after much discussion with Archer, he and his servant demanded to see his sister. After much refusal, they pushed their way into her room, where to Kaneda's shock found her dead, lying on a bed, her eyes hollow, her skin pale and her hair white. After he and his servant threatened one of them they were told the horrible truth. That they had set him up to become the sole participant, that although their energies were strong together they were even stronger if one of them were to take the power that they shared. So they plotted how to get her out of the way, they planned and executed their plan by changing the surface area around her so that no matter what she did she would slip and the stool was controlled by magnets under the floor in order to quickly move it into her path as soon as she fell. Making her neck snap and bringing forth the events that took place afterward.

Kaneda didn't know what to do, in a blind rage he tapped into his sisters power and released a shocking scream, the first time any sound would clearly come out of his voice. It brought the building to the floor, killing all that were inside except for Kaneda and his servant. But he knew all he did was take out some of the grunts that were in the building, the ones that mattered, the ones that planned for this to happen were still alive and on the run. He knew then what his wish was then, to have all the people killed of the clan that made him lose his beloved twin sister. Archer understood and felt that it was just, to have those responsible to pay in kind.

So they continued to train with eacother, Kaneda with a new fire igniting in him trained to use his and his sisters powers to win the war.

[color=ed1c24][b]Magecraft Section:[/b][/color]

[color=ed1c24][i][b]School of Magecraft:[/b][/i][/color] Taiji

[color=ed1c24][i][b]Skills/Spells List:[/b][/i][/color]

[color=f7941d][i]Martial Arts Training (Jeet Kune Do and Kyusho-Jitsu - Pressure point fighting style)
Weapon Proficiency: Nunchaku[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Enhance Noise (4):[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Sonic Scream (4):[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Absolute Silence (4):[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Dampen Noise (6):[/i][/color]

[color=ed1c24][b]Amount of Magecraft Mana:[/b][/color] A-

[color=ed1c24][b]Other:[/b][/color] Carries the set of nunchucks in the back of his pants.[/hider]
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[hider=Servant]
[color=ed1c24][b]Class Name:[/b][/color] Archer

[color=ed1c24][b]Nicknames:[/b][/color] The Sad Knight

[color=ed1c24][b]Alignment:[/b][/color] Lawful good

[color=ed1c24][b]Servant of:[/b][/color] Kaneda Kitomuru

[color=ed1c24][b]Catalyst For Summon:[/b][/color] Piece of the round table 

[color=ed1c24][b]Weapon(s):[/b][/color] Noble Phantasm Bow and a sword for defense.

[color=ed1c24][b]Wish:[/b][/color] To earn his right in battle and to be forgiven from his King.

[color=ed1c24][b]Abilities:[/b][/color] 
[color=ed1c24][i]- Mana piercing wind blades (b):[/i][/color] When he focuses his energy into his bow it grants him the power to breach through magic based armour as well as their normal armour, this drains him of his mana and cannot use all the time.

[color=ed1c24][i]- Song of Death and Glory (a):[/i][/color] Archer hones in on his target firing multiple shots into the same spot over and over again  pushing them to the point where they can't move anymore and begin piercing through their armour, he then harnesses his energy into a fine shot that shoots into the vitals before imploding inside of his target.

[color=ed1c24][i]Harp of Healing/Harp Performance (c): [/i][/color] Is a Skill that gives the user the ability to exorcise and heal others by playing a melody with a harp.

[color=ed1c24][i]Admonishment to the King of Knights (b):[/i][/color] Removes a buff from opponent.

[color=ed1c24][i]Grace of the Unexpected Birth (b):[/i][/color] Charges own Noble Phantasm.

[color=ed1c24][b]Skills:[/b][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Magic Resistance (b)[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Swordplay (c)[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]Independent Action (b)[/i][/color]

[color=ed1c24][b]Class Abilities:[/b][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Clairvoyance (a):[/i][/color]
[color=ed1c24][i]- Long range shots (b):[/i][/color] Archer is able to fire from long distances, over 100's of km away with ease.

[color=ed1c24][b]Base Parameters:[/b][/color] 

[color=ed1c24][i]Strength:[/i][/color] B
[color=ed1c24][i]Endurance:[/i][/color] B
[color=ed1c24][i]Agility:[/I][/color] A
[color=ed1c24][i]Magical Power:[/I][/color] B
[color=ed1c24][i]Good luck:[/i][/color] E
[color=ed1c24][i]Noble Phantasm:[/i][/color] A

[color=ed1c24][b]Noble Phantasm:[/b][/color]

[color=ed1c24][i]Name:[/i][/color] Failnaught Fantasia of Lamentation
[color=ed1c24][i]Quote:[/i][/color][i]"I fight on the battlefield to prove myself worthy to my king."[/i]
[color=ed1c24][i]Rank:[/i][/color] A
[color=ed1c24][i]Type:[/i][/color] Anti-Army
[color=ed1c24][i]Range:[/i][/color] 
Short-Mid Range - Quick strikes from strumming his strings
Long-Extra Long Range - Needs to hold longer, builds up strength
[color=ed1c24][i]Description:[/i][/color] He wields a bow that possesses multiple bowstrings resembling, and is in fact a string instrument. This bow does not launch arrows, but invisible sonic vacuum blade to cut off foes. Due to the nature of this weapon, he can attack with a slight motion of one finger.

[color=ed1c24][b]True Name:[/b][/color]
[hider=True name & Bio]
Tristan

No matter what he does, he seems sad - and beautiful.

One of the Knights of the Round Table from Arthurian legends. His Class is Saber, but he is often summoned as an Archer due his renown with a bow. The tale of Tristan and Iseult, the woman he loved, is a legend boasting outstanding popularity in Europe.

Tristan is a child born from Rivalen (king of Leonois) and Blancheflor, the younger sister of Mark, prince of Cornwall. However, his environment made fitting to call him a "child of sadness" To begin with, his father Rivalen died in battle without ever being able to see Tristan's face. His mother Blancheflor died post partum, soon after naming the boy Tristan and entrusting him to a loyal subordinate of Rivalen, Loire.

Afterwards, Tristan became a knight that served under his uncle, King Mark. Tristan served the king as a good knight--- and the king too had a deep trust in this handsome knight,

But, one day, Tristan fell in love with a woman named Iseult. No, he was made to fell in love.

The tragedy probably lied in the fact that Iseult was the woman who King Mark loved and vowed to marry. Before long, thanks to the admonition of King Mark's courtiers who envied Tristan, he was forced to leave the royal court.

Afterwards, he came to marry a woman who had the same name of Iseult by coincidence, but still his feelings for the past Iseult only grew stronger.

Eventually, Tristan collapsed due to being poisoned in a certain battle and, on verge of death, wished to meet with Iseult. "A white sail if she comes. A black sail if she does not--" Upon seeing the boat carrying Iseult, Tristan's wife Iseult whispered the following. "A boat with black sails is coming this way" The tale of Tristan was put to an end by means of a modest treachery (lie) towards a husband who, despite taking a wife, never tried to love her.
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[color=ed1c24][b]Appearance:[/b][/color]
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