[quote=IVIasterJay]Aaron Rayne[/quote]

Before I can say anything, I need to see this finished—though naming conventions in Kataloni are uniquely Japanese as well as their weapons are reminiscent of that same culture. Keep me posted.

[quote=Gokiburi7]Eden Kasratu[/quote]

I know you understand the ramifications of the eternity force and the corrupting bits about it, so I’m sure you’ll be writing the overbearing virtuous natures of the eternity force. So I’m looking forward to that, and as I’ve said before I like bits about Ari—and the cultist background. Also, curious if you’re sticking with the Kasratu name as it sounds relatively Asian in nature? Was his family descended from the Salasi peoples? Kata? Ludosi? Curious.

[i]“Over the course of Dalance's life, under the spiritual guidance of an ancient harmonic artefact, the group had laid the foundations of a plan to cease the very planet's orbit. Through this method, his father's insane notations announced, half the world would be scorched to nought whilst the other half would freeze and die. Life would be removed from the world, thus any scope for the creation of chaos would also perish.” [/i]

– I’d like to know a bit more about this even if it’s a bit laid in the backstory; also why does it sound to me like the totem here is one of the virtue named Justice rather than Humility, etc. Give me a reply on the above and I’m sure this thing will likely be ready to go.

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[quote=GravityFlux] Tiberius Winter[/quote]

The anglo-indian appearance intrigues me as you describe landeian origin, which I describe as “generic terran”. I wonder if that landeian ethnicity has been watered down through Khani (hindu) and Salasi (tibetan/shaolin) family members? 

I have no questions or qualms with techniques or anything as is. Approved. Though I would like some notes on his earlier travels and such. =)

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[quote=Noel]Lynnette Alwin[/quote]

The only thing I’m really concerned about with this amazing piece of prose is the possession technique. How do you propose this is balanced and so on? Otherwise this thing is ready to go.