[@CandyCoated]
Please put the sheet in a hider, and delete the double post. 

I'll have to ask that you heavily clean up the sheet on the basis of things like punctuation and grammar. 

The personality is closer to a laundry list of a few basic traits than a sketch of a person, and gives little insight as to what she's like. 

The history provides almost no detail as to the content of how she did what she did, or her involvement with people such as the employer. Moreover, having a network already based out of Deln is a no-go, as the idea is that the PCs are new to the city. There are some other issues, but I'd like those to be addressed first. 

Please explain the breadth of her abilities in detail, rather than just sayings things like "she has some physical spells". Aspects like the limits of her Glamour are similarly necessary. 

Details on weapons. See above for the network stuff. 

I have no idea what you mean by the first artifact, and the second one requires much more explanation.