News #1: [indent]I updated the OP slightly to include that outsiders (not born in Gobi) are allowed to not be useless as ninja.[/indent] News #2: [indent]I updated my character's sheet to include the war, because I completely forgot about that. I encourage you all to do the same. I also added how she came upon the village, since it is not a village you just randomly stumble across.[/indent] [hider=Natsu review] [quote=@NobodiesHero] Knowledge of the Human Body [b]Natsu knows what the body likes and what it does like.[/b] He knows how to hit all the pressure points, either for good or for bad. One well placed senbon from him can paralyze you for life. [/quote] I think you missed a ”not” there. [quote=@NobodiesHero] Kage Bushin no Jutsu/Shadow Clone Jutsu [/quote] Kage bunshin is a Konoha kinjustu (Forbidden Technique). You'd need a pretty good story for how he learned to use it. [quote=@NobodiesHero] Reflect (Can't find a good Japanese translation for the way I'm using the word) [/quote] Hansha (反射). It's the physics kind of reflection; to bounce things back where it came from, basically. It's also when light bounces off of a surface, though. I see nothing else wrong with your character. All you really need to do is include how you got a hold of the Kage Bunshin. We'll have to wait and see what Halvtand has to say, though, because I might be distracted by the whole “Prostitute Ninja” thing. [/hider] [hider=Denki review] [quote=@Neurovoid] Jonin [/quote] We stated in the OP that we were looking for Chuunin character's. This is not to limit anyone, but to make sure that we're all on the same page from the start. One of the things we do not want is the set teams of Jounin and Genin that you mention. This also means you can sadly not make a Genin. [/hider] [hider=Tashiro review] [quote=@BladeSS4] Height: 6'0, 182.88cm? (not sure if that is right) Weight:: 205 pounds, 92.9864 kgs? (once again not sure) [/quote] Yes, it's right. But just write 183 cm and 93 kg. You seriously need to use uppercase letters in names. I nearly broke my neck from all the ticks. You also wrote “kinjutsu” (which is “Forbidden Techniques”) instead of “kenjutsu” (which would be “Sword Techniques”). Beef up your History a bit. You need to fix your format on the Jutsu. I need to discuss the technique itself with Halvtand before I make a verdict (as is the case with all custom techniques). [/hider] [quote=@Zapdos] I need to sleep soon since I have work tomorrow, but I am interested in this and would like to reserve a slot for a character if possible. Maybe some kind of Byakugan user like that one mist guy (forget his name right now)? (I.e. not necessarily a Hyuga character.) I'm just brainstorming right now, so let me know if that would be OP or not. I might even go with something else entirely. [/quote] We have room, still, so feel free to make a character. The dude's name is Ao, if you mean the one who stuffed a Byakugan into his own skull. Well, I don't know if it'd be OP. That's depend on the rest of the character, 'cause if all he can is is have the Byakugan, then he'd be pretty useless. I would advice against making a character with the Byakugan, though, Hyuuga or not.