[quote=@Spanner] [@Buddha] Can you please clarify your opinions about the justifications/questions made as an answer to your corrections? It'll make the correction of the sheet considerably easier. [/quote] Alright, first off, some of my comments are not meant to be 100% serious. :lol I don't really care about the callsign for instance, so that it's a mouthful doesn't really matter. [quote]I picked the villages at random due to lack of info, relies mostly in the fact that Konoha was the village that gave Bijuus to Kiri in the past according to the cannon. I can either change the villages or twist ir to make him one of the reasons for the war, whatever you like the most.[/quote] True, but there's a reason they're at war. I could've clarified it but opted to do it in the IC, because otherwise I'd have to give away the main antagonist already and I'd prefer not to do that. But in short; there's a war between Kirigakure and Konohagakure at the moment, however that only started some.. one year ago? So it's possible that he's from Kirigakure. However, them being allied after the first war seems unlikely to me. I'd also opt to change the villages (or just leave the alliance bit out? Whether you're allied or not, during peacetime you'd want to avoid killing shinobi of another village, especially in an exam). A single shinobi being the reason for a war seems a bit much, especially if he went rogue anyway. [quote]A minor info gathering would let clear that it was done under personal grudge, and doing so when he was still a 15 year old boy makes it clear that he has the ability to reinforce the village. As for the time, it is supposed to be an act taken as soon as she became the kage, securing strong individuals loyal to her - a common practice in a place who has coups as a tradition.[/quote] There are plenty of strong shinobi in Amegakure though, and for a village that is relatively small and has been the underdog for a long time (and thus at risk of invasion) I'd say that taking in a wanted criminal is more of a reason to get invaded than a reason to strengthen herself. I see where you are coming from but I don't think the con's would outweigh the pro's in this case. [quote]I'd rather say that it is like opening the fifth of the eight gates for a short time but only enhancing speed if i had to make an analogy... Still, it's pretty similar to body flicker in practice. I can probably change that if you want[/quote] Which is a bit too much. In practice, it's too much like body flicker. In fact, it's unknown currently how swift release is even different from body flicker; [quote=Narutopedia]How this nature differs from the common Body Flicker Technique, aside from speed difference, is unknown. It is possible that Swift-natured chakra is being applied to the Body Flicker, which is a general skill, to produce this effect. [/quote] I'm not against him being really speedy, but there's something about instant movement that is cheesy in a fight. Also, having a jonin going around zooming between enemies finishing them all off seems like it'd force the students to just kinda.. sit back and watch. Cool in theory, but for an RP, it's not that good.