[@TemplarKnight07]


I dig this diamond, brother. I like how you are referencing my rough raps into this royale. Even using the slang paper kings.

My only, motherfucking. moan about this marvel is 3 things:

I'd like to see just a little bit more hint towards the dangers of training for magic in the culture. Not alot, even if it just the effect of such high hazard rates in the families and populace in a line or two. You did a bit of this towards your character which is a good start.

In future. Slimming its fat away a little would improve this sheet. It's good conceptually and in lore references, it just a little fat.

Over use of the word sorcerer. I know, that's like, they're name and all that title, but breaking it up even just a little helps the writing stay fresh and keep track of where I was reading.

But those are like, sheet, writing, motherfucking. shit.

I'm ready to accept this if you just solve the first one alone.