[quote=@Expolar] I feel like asking if I could help, but don't really know where to start :/ But hopefully you figure out how to make it sound good as you expect, or at least close enough. Best of luck. [/quote] Without spoiling too much, its a fight scene. I have most of it planned out in my head, I just gotta get it down on type. But its the flow and the tone that is bothering me. I'm trying to strike a balanced between cool and practical, suspensful and yet informative. Powerful, but not ridiculously so. Don't know if you can help. Its just part of being a writer.