[quote=@Crimson Raven]
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Without spoiling too much, its a fight scene. I have most of it planned out in my head, I just gotta get it down on type. But its the flow and the tone that is bothering me. I'm trying to strike a balanced between cool and practical, suspensful and yet informative. Powerful, but not ridiculously so.

Don't know if you can help. Its just part of being a writer.
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Well although it sounds difficult, it does sound like an interesting post. That probably isn't enough motivation or encouragement, but at least you're trying to put a lot of thought into the post.