[quote=@Oddsbod]

[@wxps350] Selfish opportunist, seems cool.  I like his set up too, actually bouncing carelessly between the two factions, should make for some fun relationships with any other Army/Legion characters.  Comparing caring for living parents to keeping old graves tended is a nice look into his mindset as well, that was a cool touch.

Some things I'm not super clear on with the history.  Why was he not allowed to actually see his parents?  Who was raising him, if his parents were so sick?  Did they raise her when he was young, then fall sick? If he couldn't keep a cent of the money he earned, how did he afford basic living?

On the later living, why was there a soldier garrison just hanging out at the edge of town?  You mentioned Forbhin and his mentor didn't join the Army of Heroes until the war broke out, but any trained party of soldiers would probably be working under the Army.  

You mentioned they eventually switched sides to the Legion, but after a battle where the Legion crushed Army forces, Forbhin ends up stealing an Army insignia and pretending to be in the Army, and labels his master as a Legion soldier.  I'm not sure why there're Army of Heroes soldiers cleaning up the leftover of a big fight if they were the ones who were massacred.  I'd also like to see a bit more on why they jumped ship to the Legion.

You'll also need the short personality description to go with the bullet points.  

Otherwise, I like where this character is going, seems like a lot of fun to write, and bounce off of other characters with.


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I didn't think I'd have to explain most of those details out, but:

-He wasn't allowed to see his parents because the disease was relatively easy to spread, especially towards children

-He was raised by his Uncle, but he was always drunk at the tavern

-His parents became sick when he was about 6 years old

-He made some money, but beyond basic living expenses for him and his drunkard Uncle, he didn't make any fruit from his labors

-The Garrison wasn't immediately outside of town, it was a few miles away. And if they would have been in the Army of Heroes beforehand, I can edit that in

-I made it a little unclear the moment he abandoned his master. He and his master joined the People's Legion when they defected, and in the battle, the Army of Heroes were massacring the forces on the People's Legion side, which is why Forbhin snagged an insignia and betrayed his master.

I'll edit some of these in to make it a bit more clear.