[quote=@Warborn123] Name: Vivian Velvet Age: 16 Gender: Female Appearance: [img]https://sociorocketnewsen.files.wordpress.com/2016/06/kk-2.png?w=580&h=310[/img] Desire: Vivian desires to have revenge against the angels, She wants them all to suffer for what they did to her. Ability: Her ability comes in the form of music, She is a amazing instrumentalist and can play any instrument with perfection, She can also use the power of music to summon Fireballs, Ice spikes and Electricity, further more she can use the power of music to control people, when she just learns her power she'll be able to do small things like shoot small icicles and convince people to hit themselves in the face, but at her maximum strengh she can easily raze a city or cause a riot. She is also immune to all magic that relies on sound, as she is deaf. Weapon: A Steel Violin Personality: Vivian is very pessimistic and cynical, She tends to be very pragmatic and down to earth. if this hasn't convinced you yet she is a massive debbie downer. Vivian absolutely hates all angels, due to the fact that they have ruined her life, She is very loose and hates rules of all kinds, believing that rules only exist to oppress mankind from reaching it's true potential, she is very unemphatic and is willing to kill innocents in order to get her revenge. If this was dnd she'd be Chaotic Neutral. Backstory: Vivian used to be the exact opposite of what her personality says, she was stupidly optimistic, She was born to a relatively poor family who also shared her optimism. she absolutely hated music and wanted to be a archaeologist. life was perfect for her until one day, while her parents were driving her to school, a drunken driver smashed into her car and killed her parents, Vivian got lucky though as the car crash only destroyed her hearing, causing her to be permanently deaf, The drunken driver got away with it but Vivian didn't care at all, she was so stupidly optimistic it barely affected her, this is because of the angels control over her personality, causing her not to grieve at all and simply continue on with life as if it never happened. Vivian decided all was fine and walked to school instead to go on the field trip, then upon getting her desires back, all the grief from her parents came back and it destroyed her, She quickly found out that she hates archaeology with a passion and loves music, especially the violin, but however because she is deaf she can never hear her own music. After Vivian found out the angels had indirectly killed her parents and ruined the joy of music, she vowed to kill every last one of them. [/quote] Personally, I REALLY like the concept of this character, at least in regards to its musical powers and what have you. (I possess a character who also possesses that same kind of magical violin.) But [@Windstormugly] seems to have...problems with the CS as a whole. My other partner [@Petulant] hasn't commented yet. The one problem I can personally agree with would be his problem with the Backstory. I mentioned this before, but the Angels are REAL picky assholes when it comes to their control. The free will possessed by mankind in this world is naught but an illusion to hide the control, and anything that would inhibit or disconnect them from that control over humanity, even temporarily, has to be ultimately eliminated, and has been eliminated. This, unfortunately, includes Alcohol, a substance that was practically designed to inhibit one's sense of judgement and moral control. They'd erase beer and wine and liquor and all other Alcoholic drinks in a heartbeat, because of that. As such, Drunk Drivers do not exist in this world. Accidents do though, for one reason or another. Even the smallest head turn can cause cataclysm in a vehicle after all. While I don't mind her power over the elements, (Again, have the same kind of character myself,) I'd recommend the Pied Piper ability be somehow toned down, maybe by narrowing the width of her AoE or limiting the criteria of who she controls with her music. There was also a problem he had with her Personality and her Desire, her Personality he claims as edgy as hell, and her Desire he claims as, simply put, cliche. Me? I don't really mind that myself. That said, it does seem me and Windpipe are at odds, so I'll need to talk with Petulant in order for a solid verdict. Until then, I suggest you take what was said to heart. ^_^