[@Crimson Raven] [quote=@Zarkun] So, my first nitpick is his magic's effect. Admittedly, I get that it's a unique concept, but we literally spent three days picking apart a spell that Technowizard has that essentially does the same thing, though with his eyes rather than his blood. Anyways, I can get the whole cancellation of magic, and can accept it. The issue with the blood part is that you're rather vague on how it does what it does. Does the blood absorb into the body or is there another way it does what it does? The magic name is odd, and Ex probably has a point in changing it's name, but I'm fairly indifferent to it. Also, we were in a Final Fantasy RP together run by Lennon79. [/quote] This is answering both of your guys Concerns Also I should say I prefer not to go into much detail with character sheets because I personally do better in fleshing out the character in the rp. That's why it is bare bones. I was was tired and thought I put it down... possitive I did but might of deleted it with my mouse pad. So to add to it and also explain a little why it's overpowered. For it to use it's entire effect latch would need to get his own. Blood on his opponent's skin. Or thick enough on the clothes for it to seep though and touch the skin. It will negate the power of what ever it is, until they wipe it off. Otherwise it will only make it harder to consentrate on their magic. It also only effects caster magic, not holder magic. Also, because this is so powerful is why I also made it extremely dangerous for him. He had to cut himself or use previous wounds to get his power to tuely work. Now bleeding constantly and moving around, getting his blood pumping, means he has to put down his openly quickly, or risk losing too much blood. This all depends on how much his opponent is clothed and what type of magic they use. Fully armored and or ranged is his pure weakness and hardest battles. Even with people who cover themselves up entirely with clothes. This is why he is a "master" of his sword. Because he can't control his magic he has only one form of combat he can train and focus on. I understand gaining a mastery of the sword is difficult and doesn't "magically appear" nor does his strategy. With a life of hunting down wizards or training to do so, with a family who focuses on it. It's clear that the family would teach their children these skills. Now I thought I put his in his history, but it was late and I was changing my wording often I could have left it out. He joined the guild to figure out his magic as well as getting a better paycheck. I understand bounty hunting in real life is not glamorous and axtremley difficult job. But this is a anime roleplay, reality doesn't really apply here. Even though I myself try to keep it as real as possible. Example. Ezra fighting with two extra swords with her feet. Dumb as hell. Anyway I digress. As for the magic name I thought it would be interesting for the rp, as slayer magic is gone it would create confusion and add more to the rp, as well pay omage to the dragons later magic and perhaps give a hint to how old the magic is. However I can change it to blood sacrifice and be just as content. If caits wishes for more history then I will give it. With the history I understand the cannon makes no mention of it, and the time before zarrif mostly dealt with dragons, but there is so much to history of our own world that we do not even know of that were a main part of history and what formed it today. Also this is a roleplay. All of our characters and our story is non cannon so it really doesn't matter in the end does it? It only matters to the Gamemasters if they want it in their history. The hole point of this is to build upon the history and world of fairytail. As you said [@Crimson Raven] you are trying to help me, however instead of saying "nothing is coming out as I want it so I'm just going to say it not matter how bad it sounds" you could have added more time (as clearly you did ripping my character apart) you could have found a better way of saying it. there is constructive criticism. Then there was "your help". Which really just felt like criticism. If this happened to anyone else with less thick skinned they probably wouldn't have joined and just quit here and now. Which in my opinion is not ok. The guild was created to be a place with those who were interested in writing to grow and learn. Not to be slapped down because they are not at your level. I would be more understanding in an advanced section but this is casual. Point is, if you are looking to better yourself constantly. I would work on your "constructive criticism"