[quote=@Surtr]
[@Oddsbod] I went over her moveset, aaaaaaaaaand I have some comments on her kit.

[indent]■ Black Hole needs to be reworked or removed into something different. The ability to slow down everything around herself with no chance of dodging is pretty much a super... that she has as a regular attack. Perhaps rework it into a projectile?

■ Paradox also raises a few alarms for me. She has a better teleport move than Jaden, as an instant teleport that damages people when she finishes. This doesn't seem all that fair to me, so I suggest that she also has to concentrate like Jaden does. [i]Or[/i], she gets momentarily stunned after teleporting.

■ Singularity [i]does[/i] leave her open, right? I'm okay with it being a instant/hard to dodge, move long as she is left open during it as it seems incredibly easy to counter.

■ My other problem is that her moveset seems a bit... schizophrenic to me. Like, it doesn't really fit a archtype to me, and she can do pretty much everything with movement abilities, several projectiles, defensive moves, and a few melee moves. Is she supposed to be an all-rounder or?[/indent]
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■ I was hoping that the one-shot limit on it would make it less like a regular attack, but yeah.  Would it be more permissible if I dropped the time to like, four seconds?  Savo also suggested that it slows down Verga as well.  Other option is making it a once per day shot instead of once per hour.

■ I was again sorta hoping the shot limit would make that less troublesome, since she can only use it three times, where Jaden doesn't have that kind of limit.  I could drop the shot limit down to two, and drop the range down.  

■ Singularity pulls them in quick, but she can't move while it's active and she can't use her OP ki attacks.  That said, she can always cancel the move if she sees something coming and jump out of the way, or use the Gravitaty Lens.  Hm.  I don't want it to be super duper easy to counter, just like a solid ranged grapple effect.  Maybe if it wasn't as hard to dodge?  

■ I'd started off trying to slot her into some specific role or archetype, but I was having trouble with it, and the general consensus in the chat was just go for a character and see how she landed once personality and backstory were finished.  I ended up with an emotionally stunted person who, after going through an emotional, messy, and unhappy time in her life, decided to escape all that and devote the rest of her life to tracking down power wherever she could find it.  And I thought a moveset that was less a cohesive set of interlocking skills, like Justin's or Jaden's, and more a collection of specific high-powered ki-moves was what would fit best for the character.  I'd hoped that them all being vaguely astrophysics and light/energy/gravity themed might be enough to tie them together a bit more, but if you guys still have issues I could tweak them up a bit more.  sorry have to leave literally right now but I'll be back soon can asnwer other question in discor