[@Hellis] Okay, let me review your characters!


[b][u]Ben[/u][/b]
[indent]■ I think Ben is pretty good overall, but I only have a small problem with the whole Vampire angle he's got going on feels... tacked. Like the whole "father was a monster" was poorly explored, and only briefly touched upon before moving to the next thing. I honestly forgot that he was a vampire until your weaknesses mentioned it. lol

■ Could you fix the coding errors in the sheet? It just looks a little jarring.

■ I think you need to expand a bit more on his fighting style section. It only explains how he functions as a fighter, not how his moves look, how he fights, etc.

■ Otherwise, I think his moveset is good.
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[b][u]Takio[/u][/b]
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■ Again, can you fix the coding errors in his sheet?

■ Again (x2) you need to expand a bit more on the fighting style section... look at what some of other characters have written for their fighting style.

■ Nationality is for telling the reader which nation they came from, not their ethnicity. That's for the appearance section.

Unless Sweden-Japan is a fictional nation you're pushing.

■ You left something for Ben in his OTHER section. lol

■ I think he's good if you correct a few problems.

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