[quote=@Flagg] Accepted. A few suggested changes: I would get rid of any reference to elves which, unless someone else brings them into the world, we can assume don't exist in this setting. Secondly, you dont nec have to spell it out in your CS, but it would be good to think a bit on how the Threll viewed Daigon way back when, and how they think of him now. Were they his slaves? His allies? Lastly, while Carrick's order might work with the Marcher Kingdoms, the Imperium itself is very intolerant of nonhumans and unlikely to permit widespread interaction btwn its subjects and Threll hunters. Doesnt mean the threll can't operate in the Imperium, just worth it to keep in mind that their legal status would be shaky at best. [/quote] I actually rewrote the character from an old CS for another RP that never started, the references to elves are remnants from that. Guess I missed to remove some of them, will get on it. I'll think about their stance on Daigon, and if they even had one (as a race). The order will definitely have had one, at least. Lastly; holy shit I had missed the "Some setting details" hider entirely. Sorry 'bout that. I'll rewrite the order's relations with the Imperium accordingly. Is it safe to assume there are other human nations to the west and/or north? If so I'll switch out the Imperium for those entities and have the relations between the order and the Imperium be somewhat antagonistic, though not hostile.