[quote=@Tybalt Capulet] Appearance: Sandy-blond-haired, with brilliant green eyes. Decently fit (not a bodybuilder by any means, but clearly someone with an active lifestyle). Caucasian in appearance, with an almost absurd number of burns and scars over his body. Wears a loose sweatshirt with a hood that's big enough to shadow his face, and long sleeves to hide his scarring.[/quote] This could describe just about anyone. Either you'll need a photo or add more to this description because I am not getting a very clear view of who he is. Facial features. What is a brilliant green color? Green can be so many colors, from brown greens to blue greens? Are his facial features pensive, board, squared? What is his height? What does he weigh? What does he sound like? Etc. I admire you want to write your own appearance, but I am going to ask for a bit more in that case. [quote] Personality Strengths: Driven, self-motivated, persistent, empathetic. Personality Flaws: Stubborn, often unpleasant in conversation, withdrawn. Dislikes intimacy of most kinds, as he's perhaps a bit too conscious of his injuries and their unsightly appearance. Bleak outlook on life.[/quote] There should be more than enough accepted characters, North, and Washing machine to know what I will accept in my personality sections and what I won't accept in my personality sections. This is one of the things I won't accept. Go look at Washing or North sheet to see what I would like. Clear, definable people, who feel like people, and not just a list of traits. [quote] Powers: Any injury sustained by Dom can be transferred to another person through skin-to-skin contact. He has slightly increased pain tolerance, and his ability works both ways; he can also heal others by taking their injuries onto him.[/quote] This needs to be better defined. As I see many problems with it. It has the potential of power playing and it is a little broken. I did say that even healing abilities will require limitations. What wounds can he transfer? Are you really trying to tell me that if he's severally bleeding out, magic poof wound gone? Because I am pretty sure if you're heavily bleeding out it could be hard to focus, dizziness, shock, and other factors. [quote] Skills: Major: Survival skills, reflexes, hand-to-hand combat (brawling) Minor: Numbers. He could probably count cards if he had to. Urban navigation, singing voice.[/quote] I am going to need more to go off of here. How does he actually utilize these skills? Where did he learn them? Etc. [quote] Weapons: Switchblade, empty airsoft pistol (for intimidation purposes, as it looks real enough).[/quote] From personal experience. Working as an actor and at a haunted house, there is no way you can intimidate someone with an airsoft pistol. Law require all fake weapons have an orange tip or light green tip. Even air soft guns come with this. [quote] History: Dominic's life has been, up to this point, difficult. A college dropout, he lives in a tent in a secluded part of a city park, and works whatever jobs he can find to keep afloat. He's conflicted about hero-ing, as he's a deeply compassionate man, but his ability hurts a lot to use, and he hasn't really seen it have any positive effect on his city. Most of his hero-based activities are simple acts of vigilantism, which he does while carefully dodging real authority figures. His lack of any permanent connections also grants him a certain degree of freedom in his actions. Dom first realized his ability when he drew his mother's bone cancer into himself in order to cure her. It wasn't an intentional act, and while he passes the damage from the disease into others as a weapon of sorts, he still carries the disease itself, as he refuses (from a moral qualm) to pass cancer on to anyone. [/quote] You failed to mention Rogue X in your history. How did he come to them or join them?