[quote=@Tybalt Capulet]
I've made some significant changes! Hopefully it's up to snuff. Thanks, [@BrokenWashing] for the help!
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Don't take this the wrong way. I'm not trying to be a bitch, or take the reigns from Angel in any way.

But, while you've made it better, there's still lot's of room for improvement.

I'll start on the appearance. What does he wear casually? All you have noted for him to wear is a sweater, which leaves me with the impression that that's all he wears, and his junk is just hanging out for all to see. [s]And that's not something I enjoy picturing mind you.[/s] Not to mention, what's he wear when heroing? Does he wear his casual outfit? Or does he have a specialized outfit. This needs to be stated.

Next, his ability. I'll be honest. It's OP as fuck. I like it, it's an interesting idea, but it's OP. Especially if he can just slash his throat, then touch an enemy and transfer it before he dies. There needs to be obvious limits set. How much damage can he transfer to a person. How much damage can he himself take on from others. Is there a time limit to transferring wounds? With such a powerful ability, you have to be as descriptive with it as you can.

Next, skills. Having good reflexes, and being hard to catch off guard(called being alert) are two completely different things. Urban Navigation, with the way you have it listed, makes it seem to me like he has some amazing ability to read street signs, which isn't really a skill at all. [s]I would word it as him being able to read a map, as not everyone can, me being one of those people that are constantly confused by them.[/s]

Lastly, equipment. What exactly is in that bag of his? Again, you have to be descriptive, because there are plenty of things that could be seen as 'necessary' that wouldn't fit in a bag. I don't want to see him pulling every item that might ever be needed out of his bag as a joke, this isn't an lol anime, it's a semi-serious comic roleplay.


Please don't take this the wrong way, just trying to be helpful.