[quote=@TwelveOf8]
[@ArenaSnow] Very good writing. It was quite descriptive and atmospheric. In my uneducated opinion, there isn't really any grammatical errors that are very noticeable. However, maybe ease up on the Oxford commas a little? Perhaps use more sentences? I also grapple with such a prospect. 
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Comma structure is probably the single worst thing on my writing. Typically, reducing them requires me to restructure sentences in such a way I no longer feel they have a place. I think in a trail of thoughts, which creates sentences like this. At best, this is as far as it goes - at worst, my comment on this being a trail of thoughts would include these two sentences comma'ed together.

So yet again, a reminder to knock off the damn commas. I'll make myself feel better and say hey, at least I use them...

I could say pretty much the same on you, based on a short glance to your post history as of late. The only difference would be your comma issue, if present, is not as noticeable to me :p

[s]If you can tell, I'm huge on two-part sentences.[/s]