[@Silvan Haven]

I'll look at your character in detail tomorrow. Nevertheless, [@TheWindel]'s considerations are valid points. You could format that backstory a bit better. We are not saying to shorten it, actually I like the dedication you have put on this character. It's just that the way it's presented feels a bit "1st draft-y", if you get what I mean.

[@Lmpkio]

It's not the first time I (and others around here) say that but let me remind you again. Please, pay attention to others' posts before doing your own. A slip every now and then is a thing, doing it every time warrants more attention from you.

[@LHudson]

You could very well do as Lmpkio and pay more attention. Also, please aim to make your posts meet the standards of this RP. At least one, preferably two, decent paragraphs per post, instead of the nigh one liners you are doing would be ideal. I'm sure that you can do better than this.