[quote=@Scarescrow] [@Neo Is Delight] Fix any faults that I can find, can you look over to see if there are anything that required to change? Thanks [hider] [center][color=556B2F][h1]Vladimir von Wolfgang[/h1][/color] [img]https://orig00.deviantart.net/92d0/f/2015/323/3/4/20151118_male_beard_face_psdelux_by_psdeluxe-d9h6qt6.jpg[/img] [h3][i]”There is no great genius without some touch of madness.” [/i][/h3][/center] [color=556B2F][b][u]Name:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Vladimir von Wolfgang[/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Nickname:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Vlad, the Bloody Doctor, the Death Giver [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Faction: [/u][/b][/color] [indent]Pirates[/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Rank:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Doctor, Master Gunner [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Age:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] 32 [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Gender[/u][/b][/color] [indent]Male[/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Crime:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Killing and plundering, murdering hostages [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Reputation[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Known as "Bloody Surgeon" for most of his sick person died due to extreme pain that leads to death. There was no problem with his skill as his patient wound are perfectly patched and secured. The problem is he forces his patient to suffer the pain of the whole process of surgery. But that was during when he is still on the mainland. In the sea, his brutality takes to a whole new level. When attacking an enemy ship, he prefers to incapacitate some survivor to only patch them up after the war. The patients will have to suffer having surgery without painkiller. Most of them died but there had been some exceptions. If the patient succeeds to survive the whole operation and starting to have signs of getting better, then he will just give them a simple death. A bullet to the head. Thus, making his death list to be at least few pages long. But he will not do it to all those above him on the ship. [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Height [/u][/b][/color] [indent] 6'1”[/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Weight [/u][/b][/color] [indent] 150 [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Appearance [/u][/b][/color] [indent] Vlad is tall, but a little thin. He always comes to other as a man in a long black jacket and covering his face with a bird-like mask. He prefers wearing a lamellar with a gambeson underneath to provide maximum safety for himself. [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Positive Traits:[/u][/b][/color] [indent][list] [*] Intelligent [*] Serious [*] No mercy [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Negative Traits:[/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*]Sometimes lack of compassion [*] Pessimism [*] Over thinking [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Personality Description[/u][/b][/color] [indent] Sadistic, a little narcissistic, and clear traits of both sociopath and psychopath. He usually prefers to spend his time alone, mumbling, reading, or practicing his skill on a fresh corpse. This corpse can be later stored in a huge glass vial or just simply dumped into the sea. His favorite type of book is philosophy and autopsy. [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Quirks[/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*]Studying [*] Thinking [*] Unusual sleeping habit: Vladimir only need to sleep about four to five hours each day [*] Introvert [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Specialties [/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*] Well-known surgeon [*] Good at using muskets and flintlocks [*] Decent at close melee combat: He is better than the crew but weaker than his fellow teammates. [*] Hierarchy of power: Vladimir will maintain his respect to his peers. This can be used to ask him favors like trading hostages, but it always accompanied by a suitable price. The only person that could overpass his code is the Captain, receiving all of his respect and does not require to make a deal with him. [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Weaknesses[/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*] Too strict to tolerate others' fault [*] Not very good at socializing with other [*] A little xenophobic to strangers. [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Inventory[/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*]A long black coat [*] A bird mask [*] One musket, a box of black powder, and bullets [*] Experiment tools [*] Two boxes of surgical equipment. [*] Lamellar: A subtype of laminar. "While Laminar armor was not always made of leather, it was not uncommon. Laminar armor is an armor made of horizontal, overlapping rows of scale plates made of various material. It was popular throughout the Middle East and Asia. If you think of Japanese foot soldier, or a Roman foot soldier's armor often called lorica segmentata, this is it. It's hard to distinguish the difference between Lamellar and Laminar, being essential also made of horizontal rows of plates. However, they were often laced together and not overlapping, and this armor was often worn over padding underneath. So this would be the type a Japanese foot soldier would wear, yet not what a Roman one would wear. So essentially, it could be considered a subtype of Laminar. "([url=https://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/166179-medieval-arms-and-armor-historical-guide-to-warfare-and-contexts/ooc] Medival Arms and Armor: Historical Guide to Warfare and Context [/url] ) [*] Gabesome: "It was used either on its own, or under chainmail/plate armor, the Gambeson was a thick jacket that could doubly serve for a winter coat. It was made by what we call 'quilting' (the process of sewing two or more layers of fabric together to make a thicker padded material), and its inner layers were filled with various things, such as wool or horsehair. Due to how thick the Gambeson was, it was surprisingly good at protection, though of course men often needed heavier armor to get the job done." ([url=https://www.roleplayerguild.com/topics/166179-medieval-arms-and-armor-historical-guide-to-warfare-and-contexts/ooc] Medival Arms and Armor: Historical Guide to Warfare and Context [/url] ) [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Relic: [/u][/b][/color] Vial of Change [center][img]https://i.pinimg.com/564x/2f/69/4c/2f694c483404182ad0cd10fdee2eb98c.jpg[/img][/center] Injecting this vial into any living being will grant it the power to create a chemical that causes hallucination and further increase the sensitivity of the brain. This product when inserting into others can increase their regeneration but will cause extreme pain as a side effect. The pain is strong enough to knock a person faint and wake them again. But after a prolonged exposure to the chemical, the patient can be immune to the pain. [color=556B2F][b][u]Fears [/u][/b][/color] [indent][list][*]Losing any parts [*] Got sick by a disease that he could not identify, thus making him died [*] Fear of everything and himself is only a product of someone's dream [/list][/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Secret:[/u][/b][/color] [indent]His deepest regret was to cure all those that had devastated his family [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Goal:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] It is fun to torture others without getting killed by the government. And get rich, of course. [/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]History:[/u][/b][/color] [indent] My past is for my own, so back off ok?[/indent] [color=556B2F][b][u]Side note:[/u][/b][/color] -Vlad has a black cat called Luna. - Vlad prefer to call Captain as "Boss." [/hider] [/quote] Okay. Take this with a grain of salt please. First, I'd like to thank you for listening to my concerns. But, like Angel said. I did things the way I did so you could add to the world. I'm not one of those GMs that likes to be like "This how things are, you have to mold your character in this way." I like the world to mold around the characters. If your character is 'famous' for being 'The bloody surgeon' then I find it hard to believe nothing is known about his past. Not to mention, he wouldn't have just shown up mysteriously on the ship the day we start the roleplay, and be trusted enough to be given one of these powerful weapons. I would say expand on his history, but you didn't even give us one. I get maybe he wants to keep some stuff unknown, but share with us some of his 'bloody surgeon' days. Share with us his history on the ship. How many people has he killed on the ship? Has he saved any of the crew members lives with his doctoring skills? Stuff like that. Doesn't have to be anything too personal. But stuff people would know. And about your relic. It needs more info. Honestly, I love the concept, and it actually fit's into the stories about the original heroes, one of them being an alchemist. But, it needs more. What exactly does it do. What are it's applications. What are it's limits. What does it's curse do. And if the pain side of things is supposed to be the curse, the cursed can absolutely NOT become immune to it after any amount of time.