[quote=@Tenma Tendo]
[@deathbringer] lol, I actually just finished up. I'm a little iffy about the backstory for Kaleo's guardian, but I believe everything else is alright ^^
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Cool! I like the recognition of the difference between book smarts and reality. Think that could be really interesting!
I'm also very happy with how he contrasts with other characters and the mystery in his past with his father could give us an interesting story arc at some point so love it!

It's a good character and I think he'd be an excellent addition to the rp but I do have two questions and two requests before I accept

1. you say taleo is mute? by that do you mean he is just quiet or physically cannot/ will not talk? If he can't talk how do you intend for him to interact?

2. The bit about his grandfather's past is fine but I'm a little confused about how his grandparents know the mother and about her and his fathers exploits (said in the hero section) if Alto never came back once he left to battle. Could you clarify that?
I think it just needs cleaning up a little bit in terms of spellings and how it reads. Give it a once over but other than that it's solid :)

3. Can you clarify Taleo's ambition a little more. I get the idea that Taleo want's to emulate his parents. His mother was a breeder his father a combative trainer. He obviously loves his mother and father but they seem very different so does he desire to be the best of both? Or is he conflicted? There are a lot of ideas in the character sheet so I just need a little bit more clarity so I understand better who Taleo is and what drives him

Hope that makes sense. Any questions let me know. Happy to help if anything is unclear!