[@Sebastian][hider=Sebastian] My problem here is the identification of Sith. During TCW Palpatine was very careful and while I imagine he may have had other possible apprentices lined up he focused heavily on Dooku while grooming Anakin. Once he knew of Anakin Dooku really was just a stepping stone to get there. 

Dark Force Wielder I am perfectly okay with, there are more than just Jedi and Sith who wield the Force, or who wield lightsabers out in the Galaxy. I should point out that Darkside practictioner does not mean Sith, if you want to look at another Darkside lightsaber wielding group in the Empire for example you have the Inquisitorus. I'd suggest that the easiest way for you to go from Slave->Force Trained->Empire is to have ended up in this organisation, Palpatine was notorious for planning ahead so I'm not against him taking you in and keeping you hidden away as a backup... without giving you the rank/title of Sith. After all Palpatine was very much a believer of the Rule of Two. When Maul resurfaced, with his brother in toe, and built a criminal syndacite for him Palpatine shut it down pretty hard. There's some good concepts here, and if you wanna discuss them in detail to work out the kinks in private you can hit me up on discord or PM. If you have anything you disagree with in what I said, let me know.

I like the faction. No issues there, consider it approved.[/hider]

[@Burning Kitty][hider=Burning Kitty] I like what I see so far, I really do and I like the input of the Inquisitorus and the references to Kanan and Ezra (Plus I love that she uses a 'replica'(I suppose?) of Ezras lightsaber as it's a reallly interesting design. I would say I would like it if the history is fleshed out a little bit more, I know you've said what needs to be said but the history is where I really gauge you're writing... however if you aren't fond of long bios (not everyone is) you can always write up a sample post instead. Though if you choose to expand the Bio what I'd be looking for is, how/why did the Inquisitorus choose her? What was she doing when she crashed on this planet? How did this old Jedi change her? How did she go about joining the New Republic? What kinda stuff did they have her start doing? What made them send her towards Hutt Space? I know it's just filler, but I feel it's important filler. If you wish to discuss/debate these points or even if these are points you don't want everyone to know, feel free to PM me.[/hider]

[@Alias] I'm really wanting to limit the number, but throw up a sheet and be sure to include lots of lovely detail. I'm gauging it on a case by case basis.

[@Archmage MC][hider=Archmage] There's some typos, but I'm cool with that as we're in cas and you did say it was a draft. 

I do have some issues, I'm not against it but I'd like you to tone down a couple of things. Such as her ability to break down any form of matter, form any kind of weaponry and replicate herself. I feel like she should be limited to either projectile shots where she essentially shoots part of herself (meaning there is ammo as she can't shoot too much without loosing actual mass) or blaster style where she uses power reserves.

In terms of breaking down everything I'd like it if you stuck to just metal and that it takes time, not to mention the metal she uses will affect her build as it's [i]real[/i] hard to change the atomic structure of something. So if she's made from like durasteel that's pretty darn awesome, but if an arm is made of plasteel nanites it's having a less fun time. As with other reviews feel free to PM me/Discord me with any disagreements/issues. I'm willing to discuss in detail in private should you wish.[/hider]