[quote=@Lovejoy] [@deathbringer]Goddamn! I knew you wouldn't disappoint! What an awesome character! I think it all fits, though there are only a few minuscule things I'd like you to change. I thought it'd be interesting if all Lanostrans eyes were bright green, like... pines reflecting off ice? Sort of. I made Lady Lanostre's power a bright emerald color in the bit about the Black Glacier, so maybe this could be the color of the eyes of her people. If you'd rather her eyes be blue, then that's cool. I love, love, love the idea about a secret Lanostran sect aiming to bring her back to power. I had an idea of doing something like that, so it's cool that you got in front of me on this. One thing though, it's been twenty years since Lanostre surrendered to Varya, so I'm not sure if the bit about "they are at a similar crossroads to the Lady's own quandary over 200 years ago" to be reflective of this, but yeah, it's only been 20 years since the Lanostran War. The last thing is just a suggestion. I added the bit about the demons and how Lanostrans fight them as a kind of sport, so maybe youy can include a bit about how this affected Astraia as a child. Was she successful in hunting a demon? Does she have the title of "R'heon" and a cool tattoo? Let me know! [/quote] glad you like it! green eyes is absolutely fine, edited, but would prefer not to amend the picture! She was a struggle to find in the first place. That ok? I'm so glad. As soon as I read the history I just couldn't get the idea of a rebellion out of my head and it just rolled from there. Not sure which orifice I pulled 200 years from! I'll amend to 20 years and tone down the quandry bit at the end as 20 years is enough for people to be starting to change but still be pretty pissed and remember the Lady clearly. you're damn right she's R'heon" can I ask does she choose the tattoo or is it a specific tatoo in a specific place? Edited anyway let me know if you want any changes!