[@That1Guy] Adding to what Fox said, there's definitely a few things that still need addressing.


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*You never actually said where Zevran is from. I assume High Rock, but no locations are mentioned.
*His encounter with the necromancer got weird; what could a necromancer possibly be doing with dwemer automata? They are machines, and unless the necromancer just likes tinkering, I don't see what it has to do with experimenting on animals.
*If he is from High Rock, have you seen what Leidenschaft wrote in regards to that region? There are a lot of things that would have potentially affected Zevran and his family. 
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Plus the other concerns Fox brought up.

I appreciate your cooperation and willingness to work with our criticism, but we are somewhat concerned that this game might be outside of your comfort range as a writer. Compared to the other submissions we've had so far, your character sheets are very scant and lacking details, and there's definitely a number of items we felt needed to be addressed, and as stands, even if we had less than 8 submissions, we wouldn't be accepting your character as-is. There's a standard of writing that everyone has to meet so the story flows smoothly, and we fear that you might get overwhelmed or not give other players much to work with when it comes to posting.

We do want this to be a fun environment for everyone, and the main reason we run this out of Advanced rather than Casual is because we do write a hell of a lot in our posts and are very detail-oriented, as well in personal experiences you tend to have all the writers comfortable with that kind of writing and working with detailed characters. 

If you feel like you can write on a comparable level and produce a sheet like the others, fantastic! I'll happily read it over on Monday, but for now you need to ask yourself if this game is going to work out for you. I don't want you feeling like you wasted your time or to give your hopes up if you don't quite make the cut.
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