@all Hey guys, don't forget that your stat reflects the END of your post. For instance, if you cast a spell that costs 100 mana during that post, your stat on top should be missing 100 mana, not during the next post. Also... I know this might be really annoying but it would REALLY help me out if you guys can list more stuff above your post. Like your Attribute, Skill (only combat-related ones), Items, etc. Put it in a hider for bonus points. [hr] [@Ithradine] Everything you did looks pretty good. Of course, barring the fact that you are acting like a retro hipster by mentioning a game that was released like 30 years ago by this game's point. Jk. Actually, I DO have one point. Just keep in mind drawing and shooting arrows will be more time-consuming than other things like swinging a sword. Not that I think you did too many things in this post, just something to keep in mind if you wanna write more narratively. [hr] [@demonspade64] I think you can squeeze in more stuff in your posts. It is meant to represent at least 2 minutes so. Also, Dirk is injured if you wanna heal him. Personally I think it would be for the best if you just say "someone gets healed" and do it. Basically it's better to do stuff within your post rather than letting someone assume you do it outside of it. Other than that... awesome! (lol I considered saying that your Aqua Shot put out Alisea's Fire Burst. Derp. But I decided since you posted first I'd count that as first for effect.) [hr] [@TaroAndSelia] Hmm... yes to your OOC question. The game is as realistic as it will get for all your senses although it may not be so visibly necessarily. Like with players. So if you slash someone's arm off, they'll take damage and their arm might hurt like hell but it won't be cut off. I'd say you can gain more mana out of Chakra Magic. 25 at least since you kinda went "I AM INTELLIGENT" [hr] [@Duoya] You can probably get more stuff done in your post since each one is meant to represent minimum 2 mins. Btw, for future narrative (or gaming) perspective, I'd personally suggest against opponents who doesn't take as much damage against blades (armored opponents for example) shield bashing is a possible attack. Btw I really do enjoy your writing, it's good me thinks. [hr] [@Leaves] I completely forgot to mention to you, we need to set up a stat for Todoro. My bad on that for forgetting. Give him an Attribute point system (same as players or any other Monsters I've put up) and I'm thinking starting out with 15 points on that. Btw I think you might be able to throw in more stuff into your post like more attacks from Todoro. Since each post represents 2-3 mins. [hr] [@Tybalt Capulet] Everything looks good minus how you might be able to squeeze in more stuff. But really, I think it's alright since you wanted to represent dodging and backing off as well as dashing forward.