[@LordofthePies] Well, you can look at the already accepted character in the other tab. But if you want a comparison with a specialist similar to your own, then look that the [@FourthKing] did. That one is acceptable too. It doesn't follow every guideline, but it has the most crucial parts. And probably the most important thing, is that they have a unique sort of feel. Their character has a lot of history and personality. Even if they didn't include a history and personality bit, from the quotes alone I was able to tell what their character was all about. The sheet just speaks for itself. 

But I don't get that from your sheet. For a 4 year running diver, I'm expecting more than that. I barely know anything. Doesn't feel like he is a character yet. You know what I mean?