Hi all, I'd like to give this a whirl and this is the CS I have so far. Any feedback you all have is welcome, especially with how balanced the custom stuff is :) [hider=Tonbo Kei] Character Theme - Song -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [img]http://safebooru.org//images/835/fcd31b41a004ab6f308c6c165b73e4997a00a1aa.png?840585[/img] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【Full Name】Tonbo Kei 【Nickname/Alias】None that he’s aware of 【Gender】Male 【Age】15 【Age Appearance】15 【Sexuality】Hetero 【Village】(I'm not certain for either of these, but I guess Kirigakure with how water based he is? Regardless I'm open to suggestions) 【Birthplace】Tonbo Household 【Alignment/Affiliation/Organization】World Peace? 【Clan/Bloodline】Tonbo Bloodline 【Rank】Chuunin 【Chakra Nature】Water 【Appearance/Wardrobe】see the pic -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【Personality】Kei has what can only be called a tranquil temperament. Slow to anger and hard to spur into action, Kei never acts hastily. A trait quite common in those of Tonbo blood. His gaze mirrors that tranquillity, almost glassy like a still pond, and reflecting the world around him and passively taking in all he sees, eyes occasionally darting in a direction before settling back into a dead stare. Every move that Kei makes has a weight to it, a deliberateness in everything from walking, sitting and even breathing belying his decisive nature. In fact, Kei is often in an almost paradoxical state inside his mind. His outwardly absent-minded gaze a result of him paying such attention to everything around him that it appears as if nothing enters his sight. Kei takes great pride in his skills with weapons and even more at his accomplishments with shurikenjutsu. It’s less an arrogance and closer to an obsession with the versatility. When it comes to kenjutsu, Kei is less confident, but his decisive nature and Tonbo training make him deadly to those unprepared for the oddity that is Tonbo-ryū. Most of all though Kei wants a peaceful life, he doubts his own motivations regarding the peaceful life, whether he wants everyone to be happy or a reason to be lazy, he's just not sure. He just wants a place where he can smile and look around at everyone able to complain about the little nuisances of life. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【History】Family training can somewhat explain Kei’s personality. From a young age Kei was taught by his father to watch, observe, analyse, and then act appropriately. Anyone walking by the isolated Tonbo household early in the morning might be lucky enough to see a sparring session between the father and son. Sparring sessions between the pair consisted of mostly the two either sitting or standing across from each other, their purple eyes glazed reflecting each other, for hours with wooden short swords resting in front of them. On some days, a single leaf would flutter between them cutting off vision and a short burst of action with almost no sound of any blades clashing, the pair contorting their bodies in impossible ways to dodge. This basic training instilled the instinct in Kei to act last, but hit first. It was this tendency and ungodly patience that led Kei through his younger years as a ninja and served him well. Many of his peers not knowing he silently judged them, criticizing them behind a gentle gaze and an easy smile, thinking them rather bull headed and not thinking things through. There never has been a 'career defining mission' nor a great personal tragedy, but through his eyes Kei saw the ninja world and how harsh it can be. He'd seen the memorials to the dead. Saw the list of names grow longer on occasion. It always brought out a sad sigh to see it happen. As time went on the missions Kei took on slowly became more and more esoteric in the eyes of those around him, taking him on more long distance expeditions, almost as if he was trying to go on a sight seeing tour. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【Special Traits】 Kei’s actual speed isn’t anything incredible among ninja, it’s his reflexes and reaction time that allows him to keep pace in combat with others that far outstrip him in speed. Patience. Unnervingly calm. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【Equipment/Weapons/Items】 Name of Weapon or Item: Paper and Explosive Tags Description: Reams of paper and explosive tags, specifically to be used with the paper shuriken jutsu Appearance: it looks like paper and explosive tags Name of Weapon or Item: Paraken Description: It’s an umbrella. It is also the sheath for Kei’s short sword while the canopy is made from a dense material made to provide cover from incoming projectiles and last for a limited time in close combat until Kei can escape. The tip of Paraken is sharpened allowing the umbrella to be a makeshift lance. The spines of the umbrella are loaded with senbon to be used in the Senbon Shower jutsu. Appearance: It looks like the umbrella in the appearance image with now external sign of being altered to house a small armory. Name of Weapon or Item: Shuriken Description: They’re shuriken Appearance: they look like shuriken Name of Weapon or Item: Kunai Description: Like the shuriken, they’re kunai Appearance: yup, they sure look like kunai -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【Kekkei Genkai 】 Name of Kekkei Genkai: Jūjun'na karada (Obedient Body) Clan: Tonbo (less a clan and more a household) Rank: Not sure. Power scaling is weird in Naruto Description: When in use there is little external indication of Jūjun'na karada. The tendons and veins become more visible at the point of use, similar to an activated Byakkugan. A true master of the Jūjun'na karada is able to have free control over all of their body at once, even forcing their own heart to beat and lungs to inhale and exhale with little to know external evidence. The Jūjun'na karada is a purely supportive kekkei genkai, it allows complete control over the body which could, in theory, render paralysis techniques less effective or allow the pores on one’s skin to open far wider allowing oxidization of the blood eliminating a ninja’s need to breathe traditionally. This manifests in combat through the instant redirection or retargeting of an attack even after the strike has been launched, or the dodging of an attack in a seemingly impossible way, such as twisting the body so that a swarm of shuriken do not hit. This gives a user of Jūjun'na karada a greater window of opportunity than most to react to attacks, for example if they are proficient enough and they feel their attack will be blocked, they can force their blow to swerve around the guard. ------------------------------------------------------- Jutsu: [hider=Canon Jutsu] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Thousand_Flying_Water_Needles_of_Death]Thousand Flying Water Needles of Death[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Senbon_Shower]Senbon Shower[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Prepared_Needle_Shot]Prepared Needle Shot[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Paper_Shuriken] Paper Shuriken [/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Manipulated_Shuriken_Technique]Manipulated Shuriken Technique[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Water_Release:_Water_Shuriken]Water Release: Water Shuriken[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Takigakure_Style:_Watercutting_Sword]Watercutting Sword[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Water_Whip]Water Whip[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Water_Release:_Water–Heavens_Convergence]Water Release: Water Heavens Convergence[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Heavenly_Weeping]Heavenly_Weeping[/url] [/hider] [hider=Custom Jutsu] Name: Isō hazure (Out of phase) Type of Jutsu: Taijutsu Rank: B Range: Short - Extreme Short Nature Type: N/A Description: A martial art devised to make use of the Tonbo family’s Kekkei Genkai with four stances. It's a highly adaptable style, made primarily to increase the user's survival rate in hostile situations rather than outright defeat an opponent The “Hover” stance is the starting form and is highly defensive in nature, designed to intercept and blow and forcibly alter its course. This stance has the left hand in front and the right behind, the user’s fingers are splayed out. When a strike is to be launched the stance shifts into “Hunt” where the only distinguishable difference between it and Hover is that the user’s fingers change to have an eagle claw like grip. Each user of Isō hazure is to alter it slightly to suit their fighting style so Kei uses the claw grip to go for either the forearm or throat to pin down the attacker pull them in close and then launch a Prepared Needle Shot or Heavenly Weeping at near point blanc range. The third stance is “Glide” where the user simple ‘goes with the flow of combat’ allowing the attacker to act as they please while the user contorts their body away from each and every blow, or at least minimizing the damage by rolling with which ever strike lands. The final stance is a pursuit stance called “Motion Camouflage” where the user oddly stays within the target’s line of sight at all times and appears to be getting ever closer in the target’s vision, despite the user not appearing to move at all. This gives the perception that the target is somehow deciding to run towards the user instead of away. [/hider] [/hider]