[quote=@vancexentan] -SNIP- [/quote] Your character is good, but as you said you have limited knowledge of bleach so there is a few things that you're going to need to clean up. - As a whole, Shinigami can live for a long time. However, 740 is bordering on one of the oldest characters in the entire soul society never mind the group, so you should probably shorten the age to the 50-300 range if possible. - The picture you are using for your Zanpakuto is from the show itself, so I'd like if you change that if possible. - I'd like to see a few more details in the abilities/weaknesses section. Whilst you've stated what is actually the case for your character, I'd like some more intricacies and expansion in this section. You did a good job though, just fix those details up and you'll be alright to jump in. [hr] [quote=@BladeSS4] -SNIP- [/quote] There's little explicitly wrong with this character and I'm fond of some of the design points although I'd like to see more detail as a whole(it's entirely optional if you want to add it). However, there's a few things that are going to need fixing from a balancing of power perspective - Change your Zanpakuto's ability to "absorb reishi that is below or equal to the spiritual pressure of the user." The design is slightly overpowered even with this quirk, but if you were able to simply destroy captain's kido based zanpakuto at this stage in the rp then it'd push it a little far. - In abilities, add more detail to how your character can do. Just give some intricacies and more flavour to it so that we can get a better feel of what your character is capable/incapable of. Once you fix these up you'll be good to go. [hr] [quote=@Loki Odinson] -SNIP- [/quote] I love this character. It's exceptionally well made and I'm pleased with the level of thought and detail that's been put in. However, because I'm myself, I'm just going to nitpick something just because it's bothering me. - I'd like you to change Master of Shunpo to something else. Shunpo is an exceptionally difficult thing to sort of learn within the Bleach universe and to say that you are a master implies that you've perfected something, and given that the roleplay is centred around young/new blood, it leaves you little room for development in this aspect. A word like adept would be better suited in this case I feel. - You may wanna lower the age a little bit. 344 is slightly old for a rookie Shinigami. Maybe 50 years or so, but this is up to you. Change that for me and you are accepted(sorry for being annoying!) [hr] [quote=@KawaiiKyouko] -SNIP- [/quote] Oddly enough, this is the same scenario as Loki's character. The design and everything is great and I enjoy the overall theme. However, there are a few things I'm going to nitpick just because they annoy me. - I don't like the term master this early. Use adept, a master would imply that the ability is perfect and they have nothing to improve on. Also, tone down the usage of kido. Perhaps 50 without incantation and 60 with incantation and specify what kido she can use just so that we know what she could pull out, given even the kido masters are not capable users of every single kido. - The age is a bit high for a young shinigami. Unless your character spent like 350 years in the Rukon district, tone it down to the 50-300 range. I do love your character however and I feel it's a fairly balanced concept. Fix those two things and you're all good with me. [hr] Reviews are done, I'm sorry for the nitpicking everyone but I'm kind of obsessive over the smaller details so I just had to point them out so please be patient with me on this! If you fix what I asked you to, just pm me to let you know here or on discord and I'll verify it so you can post it in the character sheet thread. Also would like to let you know that Syn is going to co-gm. He's a cool guy so just ask him about anything if I'm not online.