[@Dervish] [@DearTrickster] [@Mortarion]
Alright, fixed the ranking kerfluffle and the mention of the suit he is wearing. I also threw in a few lines here and there about why Sofia's grandparents didn't mind that she was put into cryo, and just a few minor things.

Thanks again for bringing that to my attention. I thought it was a wiki where I read that military ranks were different than Alliance navy ranks and were 1=1. I tried to find it, but I couldn't. That possibly makes me an insane person.

Also, thanks for being so welcoming! I really appreciate it. A lot of RP sites require me to have receipts that I'm not a newb. So, thanks for the acceptance! And yeah, I loved Iwaku, but a lot of good RPs died. There were too many trash RPs. And honestly a little too much drama.

And thanks for the comments! I am so glad that my humor gets across. Sometimes I feel like I'm not-really funny, me standing in the shower going "huehuehuehue" at something that I just thought of is what I do constantly. In a DnD session, recently, I asked everyone to roll for intiative. I then said: "things are about to get dicey." I got a lot of blank stares. So, I appreciate it!

Well. I want you guys to know that "Clyfford the Big Red Dog" was something I didn't see immediately. But upon rechecking the list, I saw that. I actually started laughing in a public place. Much humiliation. But it was very worth it. And honestly, I never thought about this while making the character. But the character is literally "Clyfford the Big Red Dog." He's a big guy. He has red hair. He's also about as gung-ho and growly as a dog, but also just about as dense and adorable. I added a paragraph into the bio about how someone gave him that nickname and he doesn't know why. [I]Someday...[/i]

Anyway, thank you for the wonderful critique! I appreciate it. I was REALLY needing help on those ranks, and I am glad that I fudged it up and you showed me what was correct. Damn you random internet wiki.

[url=https://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/4569903]Oh and here's a link back to the CS so I don't seem like a jerk that leaves you to fish for it[/url]