[quote=@SleepingSilence]Can a couple really bad sentences make you stop reading something and kill your desire to even finish it? People say the first lines make all the difference. Is that the case for you? Can something really hook you within the first bit? Or is the first sentence such a slog that you can't imagine reading the rest? Because I feel like my brain is overly nitpicky at times. [/quote]
I role-play in casual a lot, so I think it is safe to presume I have a level of tolerance for genuine mistakes regarding grammar, fluidity, spelling, and formatting. I think for a user, you would have to be a very special type of [s]English Major[/s] elitist if some genuine mistakes bother you so much you cannot participate in a story.

[quote=@SleepingSilence]But when I read nearly every single line and go, "You probably could have found a way to shorten what you just said." I genuinely feel like my time is being wasted, like I'm reading someone expanding an essay word count for class, rather than expanding a narrative, action, character or emotion being conveyed.
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It is more common for me to have the opposite problem of this. I often see where a sentence could be elaborated on for greater introspection or description in general for the benefit of the reader. Minimalism is not exclusively nor objectively better than Maximalism.