[@Lord Zee] *tips hat* 

Thank you for taking your time to read and vote~

[hider=SleepingSilence][@SleepingSilence] Teh-heh. Noted on the remark that the evil guys are evil for the sake of it. Had to sacrifice things to make the story short. 

You mean you question the necessity of the first two parts, before she meets Bloodshot? Well. Personally, I feel those parts are vital for knowing where she comes from. So that we have a closer attachment (of a kind) to her than to anyone else. I feel that’s important. Names given to side-characters was primarily to make the world feel lived-in, because a world without people is unnatural. 

I feel that, if I cut too much of this, each scene will be too short to properly connect to and it wouldn’t convey the proper emotions. They need to be [i]scenes[/i], not [i]snippets[/i], and that is why I’m rather incapable of writing short stories. This here was probably the shortest I could manage while still having a plot, heh.

Yeeeeaaaah, I didn’t actually know the anatomy of a gun, probably should have researched that, but I was very relaxed when I wrote this story and just wrote what came naturally, haha. Noted on the potentially unnecessary adverbs. “Damn it” on its own would probably have been enough, heh.

Thank you for reviewing. I’m happy you found it overall decent~[/hider]

[@Shienvien] Alright. Noted. I’m happy with “well-written”. Thank you for reviewing~

[hider=BrokenPromise][@BrokenPromise] *snicker* Hello, fancy seeing you here. And the entries are over 1000 words because [url=https://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/3678937]here’s a list of how long a couple of my previous stories have been that I happened to know exists[/url] [sub][sub]if the site will ever load it[/sub][/sub]. [sub]Mind that “Fool’s Dilemma” is a failed sub-something I sent in knowing it was terrible at the last second because I didn’t intend on entering until I forced myself the last day.[/sub] I’m not at my best writing stories that short. I compromised. This is a short story for me.

Yeah, I needed to introduce Bloodshot quickly and probably could have used a better sentence to do that with. Haha. I’m happy I warranted a “good job”. Thank you for reading, critiquing and voting, I’d be happy to see you in the contest section again~![/hider]

[@Exit] Oh. I totally messed up which one was “she” and which one was “he”. I thought “she” interrupted “his” speech by giving him her smile, and that’s why it was cut short, not that “she” cut her own speech short by giving “him” her smile. I must admit I would never ever have made the connection to Potato Head, as I connect that to characters in Toy Story and nothing else. Well, that… that makes the story a whole lot easier to grasp. … Oh, well.