I like it! It has a few grammatical errors you may want to source out, but I don't mind none for them. All does seem to be in order I merely have one question. Is this his first Range as a part of an Expedition Team? I know he smuggled in things from the outside world, but officially this is his first gig right?

I also like the additions you made! DEfinately gives a more... seedy side to Anselmo.