[@Deluge] There wasn't a chance in hell you were getting rejected. You have a clear theme with your characters and define your dorm with much more than just the decks they play. 

[@KOgaming] Oookay, there's issues here. Almost all of them have to do with the way you're selling us the sheet. You keep referring back to the decks everyone has and what the underlying strategy and cards in it is, using lingo such as 'stun' and 'engines'. This feels overly IRL and puts such a heavy focus on the decks that it feels incredibly out of place. The justification for them being WIND dorm for having WIND decks is also incredibly lame and we'd like you to try a little harder than that. Build the dorm around your characters and not the decks they play, and for the love of the holy Sophia, try not to use so much lingo. We don't want to see those terms in the thread either, because they'd be incredibly out of place in dialogue and would get you funny looks.

You're on the right track with those last two NPCs, though. They have a lot more personality than the other three and show a clear bond of friendship between each other.

[@MidKnights] Really good effort in my opinion, but mixed in with a lot of flaws. We like your app a lot more than KO's for the wind dorm, but we can't accept you either for a few reasons. If you can fix them up and re-write some things, that'd get you a spot pretty easily. Taking it from the top;

1: While we certainly don't mind everyone in Wind being calm and collected, it might be best to re-write one or two of them to flare up on occasion and break the calm demeanor, showing how wind can slowly become vicious and calm down again soon after.

2: Remember, your NPC's and main character should be at the[i] top[/i] of the dorm, not making their way up still. They're the best and represent almost the entire dorm in the competition for the top, so they should be a bigger deal than what you made them out to be. Re-write some backstory to have your main guy be the champion and have the other 4 right behind him as the top 2 through 5.

3: Your list of example cards is a bit too much of a catch-all. There isn't one defining strategy in it, you just listed everything under the sun except maybe taking control of the opponent's monsters. 'Field' and 'Equip' spells are also really broad and something any deck could have. Try not to list broad examples like this and narrow it down to 3 or so traits. Look at how Deluge, me, Satoshi and Plum handled it for a good reference on how to handle that.

[@ThePlumbum] Good sheet! Leonard and his crew are defnitely accepted for DARK, and having a psychic duelist could really shake things up. If there's one minor critique I'd give it's that there's a bit too much 'deck-talk' in, ironically, the deck section. It could be condensed to say something along the lines of: 'Leonard dislikes using raw power cards due to his abilities as a psychic duelist, so he prefers to use more defensive cards like Viruses to minimize the amount of damage he has to do to the opponent to win a duel.'

But, again, it's a minor critique and you've definitely earned your Dark dorm spot.


On that note, however, this only gives us two filled-out dorms. We'd like at least four to start the RP, and the two that haven't been filled out can be done so after the RP's start. Those who have been accepted can post their stuff over in the characters tab.