(Sorry for the double pings, guys)

[@A Lowly Wretch][@Valor]


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Hello Necron! While I dont mind the reference at all, I do have a few concerns. In his backstory you mention that he was part of a race that waged a war for an ancient machine god, and given his age it sounds like he was part of a major (if his 3-4 digit kill count is anything to go off of) war in the late 9th century. This kinda conflicts with what we have going for the Alternate History aspects of this RP. Namely that the broad strokes of history are the same as our reality, just with ki using individuals. The Boxer Rebellion had wire fu but was still put down, Robin Hood was a ki infused archer, etc. Hell even Margot's backstory basically puts her family on the front lines of French history. Thus having such a major war in the middle ages conflicts with that idea. 

I am willing to keep that war happening at that point in time if you could elaborate how the Machine God's army was stopped, and maybe go into more detail as to how widespread it was.  Another simple idea would be to make him much older and make his age vague beyond "Mythically old". While I doubt that a war of this scope would be forgotten even if it happened in the late 800's AD, I would buy it being something that happened in prehistoric times or earlier. Ultimately you are going to have to massage the war into history a bit.

Fighting Style and Moveset wise, Malus is a Mighty Melee Glacier. Hard hitting, and can take a hit, but slow as hell. I like this a lot, so far it is novel to this RP. My main two issues are living metal and the shield. The effect of post battle regeneration is fine butI would put some clear limits on how effective it is in battle. Speed, extent of healing, concentration, 'charges' etc. I prefer healing in battle be fairly limited. Similar deal with the shield. For a character that has a weakness to zoners, he has a pretty hard zoner counter. I would like to see something like him having limited mobility or offense, or having a 'life bar' to the shield.
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[hider=Al Denton]
Okay, Long ass backstory but at least I know you can write.  One quick formatting note. In order to get the horizontal lines to display properly, make sure to remove the space to make them display properly. 

The other big point is that I feel you should move his powers to the special moves section, and make them explicit moves. I think that having someone whose main schtick is sustaining power is fun, though I do request that you explicitly state that Al needs to maintain concentration or something to heal. 5-10 seconds us a long time in a fight, after all. Aprt from that, if you are comfortable with him having no special or power moves, I am fine with it too. 
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